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| 22 Jun 2014 08:50 PM |
(Intro) Hello? Is anybody there? ....I feel alone here. And it's cold...
(Chorus) Watch the petals fall, No one's here I can't do this alone. It's cold out in this wasteland. Even though the sun is sweltering... I'm down here melting Watch the petals fall, I can't stop myself from falling deeper into pain. I need help...
(Verse 1) I'm stuck down it feels like it's my doom. It's more crowed then my room. I always show people love, But they just think me as "how many things? can I screw this girl out of?" I come to people with an nice interaction. But I've been seemed as an distraction. I try my best. That can't put you guys to rest. As they say,True confidence leaves no room for jealousy. If you know you're great There's no need to hate. They must be insecure I will never be fearful I will always be cheerful But,They don't understand Watch the petals fall out of my hand.
(Chorus) Watch the petals fall, No one's here I can't do this alone. It's cold out in this wasteland. Even though the sun is sweltering... I'm down here melting Watch the petals fall, I can't stop myself from falling deeper into pain. I need help...
(Verse 2) I listen to the critics Examined by analytics one day,when you're standing on the charts. Everyone will appreciate you're fine arts. But for now,You gotta keep going Listen to the advice you gotta keep growing. but even though,I still wonder. Is it all worth fighting for,I say looking outside at the thunder. Then I remember,one day Someone is gonna be there to appreciate. But somehow I'm the one everyone wants to affiliate They do it for themselves I remember when I use to spit my twelves. But they always kick while I'm down but I'm getting up. Watch the petals fall You will never make me feel small I won't give up I'll keep pushing I will give my all.
(Chorus) Watch the petals fall, No one's here I can't do this alone. It's cold out in this wasteland. Even though the sun is sweltering... I'm down here melting Watch the petals fall, I can't stop myself from falling deeper into pain. I need help... |
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| 23 Jun 2014 11:45 AM |
| I love the meaning in the second verse ^_^ Very powerful |
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| 24 Jun 2014 01:52 AM |
ehhh... This rap was alright. 6/10 was my first rating, when I read further it was more of a 7.4/10.
Try making your lines more deep and long with more words. But do not worry - I used to do this, too!
I really would like to see more from you, Master. I enjoyed reading your rap, it really stayed on topic and made sense. Maybe try using a dictionary or thesaurus to look up some larger words, I know me and other music artists use them!
Hopefully you will be signed soon.
Keep it up!
-Fiammata (Lionblaze)
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| 24 Jun 2014 02:06 AM |
She's actually signed to my label.
8/10 |
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| 24 Jun 2014 12:17 PM |
| Who wouldn't want her? She's got talent. :) |
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| 24 Jun 2014 12:55 PM |
| She has potential talent. 5/10 |
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