jico00
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| 16 Jun 2014 10:48 AM |
I sit down 'cause I can't quite stand it How my dad left even though I'm right handed The man just slid, left mom and I stranded He jacked-son of a father like his name was Janet It's whatever though, maybe we will meet some day funny how they made this Father crap on a son-day (Sunday) even though I'm fatherless, girl I got sons so come play Explorin ya solar system, rocket ship down your runway Don't usually fall in love but you might change my mindset The way she call me daddy make me forget that mine left
Chorus Fathers day is the worst of times So all I got left is my mothers and mines Tryin hard not to end up like him But I got no one to look after so wHere do I begin? |
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shonyshon
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:13 AM |
"How my dad left even though I'm right handed"
what does your dominate hand have to do with your father walking out df.
but yeah father's day sucks. |
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:13 AM |
Alright, 6/20 the reasons. The song is too short, way too short. Also make sure you have at least 2-3 verses when making a song. Get a little bit more lyrical too, but overall 6/10 |
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jico00
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:15 AM |
| This was just a short intro to some of my skills, I'll post something longer later today |
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:35 AM |
Im not going to judge on how short it is. Im going to judge on the material and quality itself.
9/10 |
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SomePunk
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:37 AM |
How my dad left even though I'm right handed OMFG AHAHHAHA IM CRYING
it coulda' used more cowbell |
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jico00
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:46 AM |
The line 'How my dad left even though I'm right handed' is a play on words.
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SomePunk
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:48 AM |
so he left you because hes prejudice and doesn't like righties
it coulda' used more cowbell |
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:49 AM |
so he left you because hes prejudice and doesn't like righties
no. look at these words
>left >right >left me >even though i was right handed |
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SomePunk
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:50 AM |
everyone is born different your father needs to learn not to judge people i would love you if you were my son well the rorapper part is a turn off maybe
it coulda' used more cowbell |
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:51 AM |
| oh my gosh. it is a word play. do you not understand rap or something |
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SomePunk
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| 16 Jun 2014 11:53 AM |
oh i know word play i play scrabble with my dad he doesnt judge me because im right handed hes a ncie man
it coulda' used more cowbell |
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jico00
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| 16 Jun 2014 12:08 PM |
| Makng fun f the fact that my dad left me....what a nice person you are :/ |
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| 16 Jun 2014 12:45 PM |
| lol idiots like you cant stand crude humor. it's overly laughable |
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jico00
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| 16 Jun 2014 01:09 PM |
| Idoits like you still dont understand being a troll does make you funny |
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BeIiaI
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| 16 Jun 2014 01:20 PM |
| You're pun is bad, and your dad left because he was ashamed, knowing his son would ro-rap |
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Indiella
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:15 PM |
| 9/10, really good and I like the lyrics, plus I can relate. |
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shonyshon
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:27 PM |
| lol bel that was kinda messed up even though i'm crying in laughter |
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BeIiaI
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:28 PM |
| Thank you, thank you very much! Dark humour is my speciality. |
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:31 PM |
| Dark humour is my speciality. [2] |
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:32 PM |
So many other people havent got a mum or dad, and i know how bad it can feel because my mum died
but at least they have the dignity not to post a bloody ro-rap about it |
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shonyshon
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| 16 Jun 2014 02:33 PM |
| that would of been funnier if you weren't in radix |
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