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| 13 Jun 2014 03:17 PM |
A/N: So I'm thinking of Writing A Vampire Virtual Book... And its about the Story of A Vampire Princess that fell in love with the Werewolf Prince. And its not Cheesy Love story stuff so I wrote Creative Context? Idk whatever its called... And would advice and tips on what I should improve and ideas for the story that would be very appreciated... Disclaimer: This came all from my mind... And I do not have a good Grammar and Punctuation and such in English so please just enjoy the long Creative Context.
Back story: We all know that Vampires and Werewolves are at war and Vampires Dominating (In this story yes) and the Werewolves try to take it away and so there at war... And the Vampires own a castle that has a Beautiful Garden, and in this garden the Royal Family would Spend A lot Time. The Main Character Childhood memories we're held there. Anyways the point is that Because of the Damned war it was Destroyed to Shred... And so are main Char created a Creative Context about it... Way to sink away her Sorrows. Oh and I named the Garden: The Garden Of The BloodBloom. (I think its very Vampireish) Enough with the Blabla's lets get to it!
Sky and Clouds... Daisies and Roses... Birds Chirping and Singing they're Joy... Beauties and Such Roamed Here Once Upon A Time... The Garden that I used to play is now a Garden of Nightmares. Bringing the Joy into Sorrows... White as Ashes, And Dark as the Shadows, Those are the Colors That Roams This Once Beautiful Garden. Now The Garden Of The BloodBloom, Is an Empty Memory, Wished to be Forgotten. This is the Consequences of Falling for an Enemy. I now Hold Hands With the Spirits of My Mind, And Stand alone with the Corpses (Ashes)of my Loved Ones. My name Stand for 'Love' But Love doesn't Stand Anymore. (Not Happy With It) My name is Amour Van Gloom... And this is my Quest to Revive my People...
Virtual Book Name: "The Vampire Princess With The Meaning of Love." |
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Kisila
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| 13 Jun 2014 03:57 PM |
First of all, there's nothing stopping you from writing a vampire/werewolf book, but honestly, nobody wants to read about vampires and werewolves anymore. Twilight kind of ruined it for everybody.
Second - I realize that you said your grammar and all that wasn't going to be 100% correct, but try to keep everything lowercase unless it's the beginning of a sentence or a proper noun or whatnot. It's probably going to be better to use capitals sparingly rather than everywhere, even if you're missing a few capitals here and there. |
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| 13 Jun 2014 04:11 PM |
| Honestly I think your right and as for the capitalization stuff, well I like doing that. As for the Twilight thing. The new thread is Vampire Academy. And Its just for creative purpose and might put it on hold but its a future project. |
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dralion
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| 13 Jun 2014 04:16 PM |
"as for the capitalization stuff, I like doing that"
it's not proper grammar so you're going to need to stop if you want to be taken seriously |
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| 13 Jun 2014 04:26 PM |
For crying out loud. Proper grammar or not, this is internet. Some people don't care about grammar and some don't. Get that threw your skull. And plus its creative content only. Goodbye. |
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dralion
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| 13 Jun 2014 04:45 PM |
this is the internet, but if you're going to write a book you need to improve your grammar
and spelling
also if you can't take constructive criticism then you're the one who needs to leave |
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| 13 Jun 2014 04:53 PM |
| Sigh... It's a virtual book. And it's not like it's going to world wide. And I know I have to improve that but I got a whole life time for that. |
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dralion
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| 13 Jun 2014 05:03 PM |
| Hm. Thank you very much for the advice. And I will try to Improve. Life is meant for that. |
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