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Pryd7 is not online. Pryd7
Joined: 31 Aug 2012
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04 Jun 2014 01:34 PM
So I've had a novel I've been planning for a couple of months now and I think I'm coming towards the end of the plan so here were a couple of ideas that I was toying with. Can you leave a comment over which bits you like, which bits you don't like as much and any ideas you'd like to add? Constructive criticism please :)

The setting's in a not too distant future. I'm thinking around 2058 or something so heres a quick throw together of the plot so far-

Basically, from 2014 onwards the population is rising rapidly on Earth up until it cannot support us anymore. In 2054, it reaches 11 Billion. With supplies heavily contested, the world is dying. Scientists have to come up with an answer and what they create is "The Epsilon Protocol". A toxic gas will be released in the most populated cities on Earth to kill a quarter of the earth's population and restore order. However once released, it is realised that instead of ridding the world of the problem it has created an even more deadly one. Long story short it turns everybody inflicted with it into Metro 20033-Dead Space crossover mutations (Really didn't want to use zombies sorry). After raging across the world, normal society goes of the window. The story is set 10 years afterwards. Surviving governments have been carpet bombing entire cities to eradicate the mutations but to no avail. The story takes place through the eyes of a survivor trying to leave the city (undecided about which one, definitely in the US) to reach a quarantined safe zone called The Fort. Along the way he struggles against bandits, past memories and old faces. He will also have to choose between his morals and the urge to survive, even if this means committing unspeakable acts

So what do you guys think about it? I tried to make it as original as possible (Nowdays pretty much every Apocalypse story is some zombie infection or what not)so it was quite a struggle to create a solid and believable plot. What did you enjoy about it, what didn't you enjoy and what would you like added?

Sorry this is long, just looking for some honest feeback :)





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88dragon6 is not online. 88dragon6
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04 Jun 2014 05:33 PM
In 2054 the population will be way above 11 billion.
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Pryd7 is not online. Pryd7
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05 Jun 2014 01:55 AM
Well all the better for the setting! What size do you think it could be seeing as though in 2040 it's estimated to be 9 billion
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coinwisher is not online. coinwisher
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05 Jun 2014 02:48 AM
I like the plot, i've had a novel to be planned as well and this gave me some ideas. It is all well but I dislike how the character will be leaving the city and his/her only goal is the quarantine zone. Maybe you should add like side-goals, like to where he/she needs to turn on the power or save someone that sets the main character off track of his main goal. It would add more tension. But this is overall a good plot.
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Pryd7 is not online. Pryd7
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05 Jun 2014 07:46 AM
Thanks! One thing I would say is that if you did take ideas could you tweak them alittle so that it's different?

Of course. I planned for a major surprise for when he gets to the quarantined zone already and I like your idea of being caught up in events along the way

Thanks for the feedback!
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