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| 21 May 2014 07:43 PM |
[VERSE 1] Now let's start off on a good note, I'm new to this game, fresh off the boat, You're prolly thinkin', "Who's this fella thinkin' he can write a note?", Well, my name is PenEase, I got all these prollems 'cept my fresh steez, Don't laugh, cause I got my own staff, A gold bath, I'm gonna unleash my wrath , I'm still pretty new to this craft, But I'ma cook you like some Kraft, Hol' up you're prolly gonna need a raft, After I sink you like the titanic, You goin' into a panic, My rhymes are explodin', volcanic, They're fresh unlike yours, unorganic.
[VERSE 2] Now let me formally introduce myself, I was too busy making you feel small as an elf, My name's PenEase, I roll with my new Lambo keys, A Rolex watch, New Heckler an' Kotch, Twenty gallons of s(c(otch, I'm already on my way to the top, Some crazy new artist for rap and hip hop, Y'all prolly gonna hate me, But hey, y'all first gotta rate me.
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| 22 May 2014 06:19 PM |
1. Where's the chorus? 2. I don't care about grammar but some of them you should have used grammar for 3. Should be longer 4. 6/10 |
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| 22 May 2014 06:22 PM |
1. It's more of a quick introduction than a full blown song. And I think that the choruses just sound cheesy on roblox. 2. I was trying to give it a certain sound, any examples? 3. >Quick introduction 4. Thanks for the feedback |
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| 22 May 2014 07:22 PM |
Elementary rhyme schemes, basic similes, and simple metaphors.
Yet this, unfortunately, is better than the raps of half of the users that make lyrics here. |
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| 22 May 2014 07:29 PM |
| Btw, I made my name PenEase because in real life, people call me Lenny the Penny so I originally thought of making my name PenEZ but that would've been special ed, so I made my name PenEase, because I normally write out my raps in pen and I can do it with ease. ;) |
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