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| 07 May 2014 01:21 PM |
[1. Plot]
A deathly silence hung over the train as you approached your destination. Most everyone was quiet, bases didn't just... 'go dark'. Sure, every now and again there's a power outage, but the back-up generator usually kicks in and power is up a few hours later.
No, this was something different. Nothing on this rock could make an outage as serious as this happen, at least, you think. Part of you silently hopes that everyone is there, all having a good laugh about how terrible the situation was, and talking complaining about how they had all their 'important' work deleted.
For some odd reason, this was different and this wasn't just a simple power outage. But you pushed that thought to the back of your mind, as not to induce fear.
You are a part of L.E.A.D. Lunar Engineering and Demolition, when there' a power outage: you're sent first. When there's a thing that needs a good exploding, you go first. Basically any situation that is in some way dangerous: You. Go. First. You 'LEAD' the exploration of planets. No, the reason you lead was because you were expendable. Unfortunately, the only place this exploration unit has been is the moon, for it is too dangerous to send them onto another planet yet, since the government believe it too dangerous to explore Mars, even though N.A.S.A had already landed on it, but only three people have ever been there.
Seven bases have been set up on the moon, going 'Alpha' 'Bravo' 'Charlie', etcetera, etcetera. The base you were heading to was the farthest out, 'Omega' and it was also the smallest.
Now, here you were, heading to to a base that had gone dark in an underground subway-like train. Armed with only melee weapons, good luck!
[2. Rules]
No Godmodding
No Mary Sues/Gary Stus.
Romance allowed to an extent. A kiss, no more. Anything else is at your own risk and you may be kicked.
My word is law, no ifs, ands or buts.
I may appoint admins who are trust-worthy and committed.
Good grammar would be advised.
In your bio you can tell it through the story. Which I will keep track of.
Ignore trolls. Don't even acknowledge them, as it may result in a punishment towards your character. I could break their leg or something.
I will use Logic and dice to decide your fate. So tread carefully.
Put 'Lunar' in other of the CS.
[3. Classes]
Engineer: Good with technology and electronics. Has a scanner that can detect electronics. They aren't armed with any weapon. Has a flash-light
Demolitions: Good with explosives. Has bomb-resistant armour. Has two 31-H Bombs which are only to be planted if given permission by command. Armed with a night-stick. Has a flash-light.
Guardian: Used for guarding the weaker classes. Has a night-stick and a riot shield attached to left arm, which can be detached in case of emergency. Wears enhanced armour, which enhances physical strength and durability. Has flash-light.
Scout: These guys are sent in first ahead of everyone else. They have a special helmet which helps them to see in the dark and has double the range of a flash-light. Scouts wear speed-enhancing armour, which makes them the fastest class. They carry a baton.
[4. CS]
Name:
Alias (if any):
Age:
Personality:
Appearance:
Clothing (under the armour):
Years of service:
Class:
Why you were chosen for this class:
Biography:
Other:
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Hey guys, I just wanted to ask: How did I do? Constructive criticism is welcome, trolling is not, and don't praise me just because you feel I might get hur- wait, this is the internet. It doesn't matter here. OH WELL! All criticism is welcome!
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| 07 May 2014 01:38 PM |
Name: Terra Byte Alias (if any): N/A Age: 23 Personality: Cocky, impatient, friendly, a bit of a flirt. Appearance: Has long,green-and-black hair. Wears black hairband with a bow stuck onto it. Has yellow eyes. Wears black lipstick. Clothing (under the armour): Military tank top with brown shorts. Years of service: 1 year Class: Engineer Why you were chosen for this class: I was advanced with technology, and have a little knowledge of hand-to-hand combat. Biography: Rumoured to be a descendant from a legendary samurai, she can sneak up on things as quiet as a mouse. Also, she is extremely anti-social at urgent times. She always spends time with her family, as she loves them dearly. ( Note; she ain't married. xD) Other: She isn't married. Also, her name is a pun ('Terrabyte'?) Likes dogs.
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| 07 May 2014 01:54 PM |
Two things, one, you didn't read the rules. Two, Samurai, really? I know people like Japanese culture, but this is ridiculous. Also, how can you spend time with your family when you're on the moon? Also, unless you're an Albino you can't really have yellow eyes. Why do you make such a thing of 'she ain't married'?
I'm not saying it's bad, I'm just saying it needs work. Can you please redo it?
The Terrabyte thing is funny though.
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| 07 May 2014 02:06 PM |
Name: James Bright
Alias (if any): Fuse
Age: 24
Personality: Patient, but will work on electronics quickly if needed. Also a team player.
Appearance: 5'11", blue eyes, short, brown hair, medium build.
Clothing (under the armour): Wears a black t-shirt and jeans.
Years of service: 3
Class: Engineer
Why you were chosen for this class: L.E.A.D noticed something unlike other Engineers with James. He seemed to know how to rebuild things from just looking at the source, and take it apart in a matter of minutes.
Biography: Will be explained in the story.
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| 07 May 2014 02:08 PM |
(You can be other classes you know... but, accepted. Could be fleshed out a bit though.)
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| 07 May 2014 02:14 PM |
| (nah, don't really want to, engineer is cool enough with me.) |
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| 07 May 2014 02:17 PM |
( This is both part material bloodlines. It doesen't really matter anyways. IT'S CALLED THE PAST SHHH ok?
Seriously.
Don't judge critiques if you don't know what you're saying. No offence. So if you can't handle it just ignore those things.)
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| 07 May 2014 02:31 PM |
(I'm not even going to get into a flame war, I don't want to ruin this thread. But how do I not know what I'm saying? What normal person has yellow eyes? I can understand the bloodlines, it just didn't seem relevant.)
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| 07 May 2014 02:34 PM |
( People who are colour-blind have yellow eyes. Okay, can we just go and stop this flaming before anything bad happenz?)
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| 07 May 2014 02:39 PM |
(Huh, useless facts. OKAYZ LETS GET DIS STARTED!!!1!11!!!ELEVEN!)
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| 07 May 2014 03:00 PM |
The train begins to slow, then slowly stops. The lights flicker, then go off. The door doesn't open and it's pitch black.
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| 07 May 2014 04:03 PM |
Bump? Anyone else want to join?
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| 07 May 2014 04:45 PM |
| Mmm, maybe. I'll think about it. |
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| 07 May 2014 05:10 PM |
Name:Ian Macintyre
Alias (if any):Hawk-eye.
Age:25
Personality:He's a bit sarcastic,and one could call him playful. He's an intelligent young man,but he has a lying problem.
Appearance:He's 6'1. He weighs around 190 pounds. He has dark blonde hair,and grey eyes. He is caucasian,with a bit of a tan. He has a bit of muscle,but not a super large amount of it.
Clothing (under the armour):A black hoodie,and black sweatpants.
Years of service: 4 years,2 months,1 week,and 4 days.
Class:Scout
Why you were chosen for this class:He always seemed quick on his feet,and with his hands. He was also very observant.
Biography:He in an old broken town in Colorado,so a bit of his past was unknown,he graduated college with a bachelor's degree. He joined LEAD shortly after. (More will be revealed.)
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| 07 May 2014 05:11 PM |
(*Woops! I forgot to put stuff in other. Other:Lunar.) |
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| 08 May 2014 09:22 AM |
Ian I tap the door with my baton,then say "It ain't work." |
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| 08 May 2014 10:02 AM |
Name: Draven Kleran
Alias: "Convict", "Blow-out" (Really more taunting nicknames than an actual alias)
Gender: M
Age: 33
Personality: Grim and pessimistic, Draven constantly sulks about having to be in LEAD.
Appearance: http://th01.deviantart.net/fs71/PRE/f/2014/052/6/7/d1_1_by_bulygin-d77dj4h.jpg
Clothing: As seen in picture?
Years of service: 1 and 1 month
Class: Demolitions
Why you were chosen for this class: Because of his previous work. See bio...
Biography: Grew up in poverty, for one. No home, no parents, Nothing to call his own. He showed his anger with joining the military and training in explosives, serving for 5 years, then leaving and going into the finicky job of blowing up buildings, people, and pretty much anything and everything. Draven's one peeve was that he would never blow himself up, and so when authorities found him planting a bomb, Draven couldn't take his own life in one final act. He was captured, and sentenced to work in LEAD.
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| 08 May 2014 10:11 AM |
Draven Kleran
And the lights are out. Great. Fumbling with my pack, I pull out my flashlight and flick it on. Train looks normal... "Hey boss, do our radios still work?" Maybe, maybe not, just an idle question. Tapping the doors, then trying to wrench one door to the open position, I mutter "It's stuck... Anyone here have a hammer, or do I have to blow up part of this train?" |
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| 08 May 2014 10:17 AM |
| One of the more burly-looking men looks over at the door and he mutters something to the short man beside him. The short man and tall one walk towards the door, and they proceed to twist the valve and pull it open. They ready their shields and march out in a phalanx formation. They other two Guardians quickly catch up. They look behind back to the subway and announce, "It's clear, bring up the portable generator," they ask expectantly. |
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| 08 May 2014 01:24 PM |
Ian "Ey ey ey!" I grunt,as I push in front of everybody to get in front. |
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| 08 May 2014 01:32 PM |
One of the Guardians grabs you and yanks you back, shoving you to near the train.
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| 08 May 2014 04:03 PM |
Name: Anamay Quiay (coo-ah)
Alias (if any): Equilibrium (more of a nick name)
Age: 27
Personality: She is very serious, and prefers solitude, though she does enjoy certain company. She is very strict, and can be angered very easily. She has a quick temper, but contrary to that, she is quite kind to those she loves and knows well. Once you get to know her, she can be a sweetheart. She is also very protective of her pupils and mates.
Appearance: She is from Asian descent, so you can obviously tell what her skin and facial features generally look like. She has bright and fiery hazel eyes, and straight black hair that falls to her shoulders. She has a small scar across the bridge of her nose which she has had almost all her life. She is very lean and slim, weighing at a good 152 lbs, and reaching 5" 10. Anamay is fit, and quite muscular too.
Clothing (under the armour): Anamay is wearing a long-sleeved black skinsuit, which, when worn by itself, allows her to be very agile.
Years of service: 8 (and 7/12)
Class: Guardian
Why you were chosen for this class: Due to her strength and protectiveness, she was chosen for this and was perfect for it.
Biography: At age four, her parents signed her up for a children's karate class, and by age 7 she earned her black belt. She also took gymnastics during school, thus becoming very agile and swift. She stayed in school the entire duration, and at age 19 she joined L.E.A.D, after taking online college courses (whilst she was a senior in HS and right before joining LEAD). She's been working at LEAD ever since.
Other: Lunar
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