xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:09 AM |
(This is based of a book I am writing now)
In the 1830's when children worked in factories there was a 12 year old girl named Emily Ancor who made mirrors at a factory. She got tyred of making the same basic design. She secretly made her own mirror with her own design on it. Made of silver and the most beautiful design she had ever made. When the bosses of the factory found out the were furious and sentenced her to death for theivoury, They threw the mirror away so it would never be found again.
Until now...
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(Only a little will be revealed, I have not written much yet)
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1. First person to sign up gets to find the mirror. 2. Any Forum and role-play rules apply. 3. No asking for control of the RP, Only I design it. 4. Have fun.
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This is magical RP, but you don't have powers, Only the mirror does, As you will find. |
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:22 AM |
| I suggest a better storyline. Why on Earth would they kill someone just because they don't follow their terrible idea for a design? |
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Smough
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:23 AM |
@successful
there have been dumber reasons people have died.
Babalon balt chiso faboan ilsi! |
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xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:23 AM |
| It was when Children worked in factories, and the killed her for Theivoury, She took the silver to make her own mirror, She didn't pay for any of it. Did you read it ALL or did you not read it right? Re-read it is what I suggest. |
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:25 AM |
"She took the silver to make her own mirror, She didn't pay for any of it. Did you read it ALL or did you not read it right? Re-read it is what I suggest."
it never says that she took the silver, though, the only thing that hints it is "Theivoury" |
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xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:26 AM |
| It said she made her own design, I thought it was obvious.... Ohh well. I can change that in the book. Ty! |
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:28 AM |
"It said she made her own design, I thought it was obvious...."
Change the wording a bit, something along these lines
"To meet her goal of making her own design, she stole the finest silver from her superiors, even though she regretted it." |
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xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:29 AM |
| Aww, Ty bud, So It is ok if I use that line? |
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xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:31 AM |
| Cool. I'll re-boot this rp in about a week if you wanna join. |
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xXHiNatXx
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| 20 Apr 2014 02:35 AM |
| Scratch that, Can;t wait. Doing it now. |
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