bloxerftw
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| 16 Mar 2014 06:54 PM |
(it called flames engulf because it like flames engulf then rebirth like a phoenix that how the powers work( The houses burned to the ground flames engulfing all. this had ben happenninning for the fast pew days but no on could figur out why. Scientists thaught mayben it was a natural phamenomenom, but som 1 said it was a cunspearicy. Some People thaught maybe powarz where coming to evolutions and that is hwy tuis was happening. it was true c.s: Name Biogarphy POWERT (very importent) gender (also importent) age this is my first attempts at non-copied rp or non-bad rp sorry if it suck.
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eikoopmit
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bloxerftw
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| 16 Mar 2014 07:14 PM |
| (cool i lookd at your account frim the fanclub and it doesnt say item doesnt exist anymore) |
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bloxerftw
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| 16 Mar 2014 07:21 PM |
(o okay) Name John Frenzy Biogarphy he was scientist but when the flames began he got burnt. when he camwe out he transformed into a phoenix then back intwo human. POWERT (very importent) he can turn into a phoenix, use fire, and fly. gender (also importent) male age 23 |
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bloxerftw
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eikoopmit
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timpookie
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| 16 Mar 2014 10:05 PM |
Name Timothy Green Biogarphy Amnesia POWERT Can use shadows as a method of transportation. gender Male age 25
Bannanachair 10K unleashed! |
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bloxerftw
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| 16 Mar 2014 10:06 PM |
(yes! accepted!) John
I sit in my lab which is scorched, i am somehow alive after bursting into flames. 'how?!' i yell out my colleagues amazed by my survival. |
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| 16 Mar 2014 10:08 PM |
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I HAVE BEEN SITTING HERE WATCHING THIS CRAP PILE ALL DAY, JUST END THIS WORTHLESS EXAMPLE OF AN RP! How, just HOW, can someone be so stupid to make an RP this bad? It is literally the worst thing I have ever seen in my ENTIRE THIRTEEN YEARS OF LIFE.
Also, John Frenzy?! What kind of name is that?!!!? |
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bloxerftw
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| 16 Mar 2014 10:10 PM |
(hey cut me a break its my first roleplay.) john
"How are you alive john?!" my colleague yells and im just amazed as not even a single first degree burn is left. 'i... dunno' I respoind when suddenly my hand catches blue flames. |
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timpookie
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| 17 Mar 2014 01:36 AM |
Timothy
I wake up on the side of the road, bruised and bloodied. I have no idea who I am. When I get up and try to walk, I go under the shade of a tree... And wind up two blocks away, under the shade of another tree.
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bloxerftw
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| 22 Mar 2014 07:48 PM |
(sorry foir inactive mom said i go back a grade plus no more computer if I dont get grades up.( John
'woah this is amazing!' i shout again as my shocked lab assistants run away in fear. i was a monster now, and no one would think I wasn't. |
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timpookie
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| 22 Mar 2014 07:51 PM |
Timothy
That was weird. It doesn't matter, though, I decide, as I continue walking.
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bloxerftw
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| 22 Mar 2014 07:53 PM |
John
suddenly I transform into a phoenix flying away through the window. police suddenly surround me because i am flaming phoenix. |
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timpookie
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| 22 Mar 2014 07:54 PM |
Timothy
As I walk, I see a building that's on fire, police... And a phoenix.
Bannanachair 10K unleashed! |
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:28 PM |
"(it called flames engulf because it like flames engulf then rebirth like a phoenix that how the powers work("
What?
"The houses burned to the ground flames engulfing all. this had ben happenninning for the fast pew days but no on could figur out why. Scientists thaught mayben it was a natural phamenomenom, but som 1 said it was a cunspearicy. Some People thaught maybe powarz where coming to evolutions and that is hwy tuis was happening."
A conspiracy is a pre-meditated plan made by two or more persons, usually criminal related. Natural? It can't be natural if you can't put it out. Evolution? Powers? i dont even know
What is this RP about again? All you told us was a poorly written story about a house that is apparently endlessly being on fire and scientists can't figure out why, and a bunch of powers happened and all sorts of crap.
What is the goal of the RP?
"POWERT (very importent)"
Why are powers relevant?
You didn't make many (any) details. I don't think your teacher is very proud of your creative writing assignments (or really any assignment at all if that's really how you write)
Also, your plot writing is barely discernible because your grammar is terrible.
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:29 PM |
"John
I sit in my lab which is scorched, i am somehow alive after bursting into flames. 'how?!' i yell out my colleagues amazed by my survival."
How did you burst into flames? How did your lab get 'scorched'? |
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:31 PM |
"john
"How are you alive john?!" my colleague yells and im just amazed as not even a single first degree burn is left. 'i... dunno' I respoind when suddenly my hand catches blue flames.""
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:32 PM |
"suddenly I transform into a phoenix flying away through the window. police suddenly surround me because i am flaming phoenix."
Um.. Where did the police come from? Why would the police out of all people surround you? Wouldn't normal pedestrians surround you because this world is full of them? How did they suddenly appear, it takes time for police to arrive at random locations....
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:33 PM |
"(sorry foir inactive mom said i go back a grade plus no more computer if I dont get grades up.("
Yeah.. I understand why your grades are so low man.. XDXDXDXDXDXD |
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:36 PM |
I HAVE BEEN SITTING HERE WATCHING THIS CRAP PILE ALL DAY, JUST END THIS WORTHLESS EXAMPLE OF AN RP! How, just HOW, can someone be so stupid to make an RP this bad? It is literally the worst thing I have ever seen in my ENTIRE THIRTEEN YEARS OF LIFE.
Also, John Frenzy?! What kind of name is that?!!!?[2]
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:46 PM |
Oh no, someone makes their first RP, and it's not college-level work!
And this is a KID'S game, for crying out loud!
Kill it with fire!
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bloxerftw
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:50 PM |
(come on guys cut it out its my first rp stop bein mean all of you are mean stop it please especially you taiwolf123 because u are mocking me i think maybe i dont know but i think you are because it sounds like you are also i have real autism and thats why i have some bad skils in writing ok?( john
the police start gunni ngdown civilians for looking at me and i leap down in the phoenix form and kill the police. suddenly i transform back into a human, shouting "are you okay civilians? im john, I have fire powers i think because of the fires appearing around town are reborning us." the civilians all cheer me and agree when suddenly a dragon pops up made of ice.
'well time for me to fight again.' I shout, turning into a phoenix again and flying into the dragon. |
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| 22 Mar 2014 08:52 PM |
| (psst, you're trying too hard.) |
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