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| 10 Jan 2014 05:33 PM |
well, im writing a song thats not finished yet but i made the first verse and please tell me what you think:
its so blinding above me it tears the night sky into it soars into the air, like the waves of the sea hold my wrists, my hands as the sparks soak through the night |
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| 10 Jan 2014 05:50 PM |
>14+ views >no one tells me what they think |
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darko29
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| 10 Jan 2014 05:54 PM |
| Doesnt that suggest something, violet? |
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StellaOwl
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| 10 Jan 2014 05:55 PM |
| Tbh with no music and such a small amount of lyrics I can't make a good judgment |
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| 10 Jan 2014 06:00 PM |
>Doesnt that suggest something, violet? i didnt ask "tell how good it is" did i, i said for people to tell me what they think.
>Tbh with no music and such a small amount of lyrics I can't make a good judgment treat it as a poem then |
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PIERCE457
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| 11 Jan 2014 09:35 AM |
these are great can't wait to see the full song
10/10 |
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StellaOwl
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| 11 Jan 2014 09:36 AM |
Idk, I don't want to insult you summer but I'm not feeling these lyrics
With such a small amount of them I don't get much meaning or flow or point
Sorry, that's just my opinion |
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| 11 Jan 2014 09:41 AM |
i wrote another verse:
its so blinding above me it tears the night sky into it soars into the air, like the waves of the sea hold my wrists, my hands as the sparks soak through the dark
as the dreams fall apart we will sit counting stars as it begins to start our cold breath will flow over the lands it seems so far...
i might write another verse, idk. i still need to write a chorus though |
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