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Re: I. SUCK. AT. REPORTS.

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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 10:49 PM
The author of The Maze Runner is James Dashner. James Dashner is the author of another great series such as The 13th Reality. The Maze Runner is Science Fiction and it also has the characters Gally, Minho, Teresa, Thomas, and Chuck. Gally is the fighter, Minho is the leader, and Teresa is the only girl. Thomas is the most important character. He is the newcomer to the Glade and he becomes friends with Chuck while he’s there. He's very hardworking and determined. If I had to rate this book I’d give it about a 7/10. I have read much better books, but this book was pretty decent. I would recommend this book to anyone looking for a suspense in a book.
Basically the story is about Thomas, a newcomer to the Glade, coming only knowing his first name. He wasn’t alone though. They had many others at the Glade. All of the people there were boys, but one girl came. She came the day after Thomas, but people are only expected every 30 days. Thomas and the others go through a deadly maze with many deaths, but keep going.



This is a body paragraph and a half done. I like to write the body then the introduction and the conclusion. Dang I need help...
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cloakedyoshi is not online. cloakedyoshi
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09 Jan 2014 10:50 PM
isn't the key thing in essays to not restate the entire plot?
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 10:50 PM
What level class are you in?
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 10:52 PM
Asks for a summary of the plot. I'm not sure how to do that...
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 10:52 PM
@Refractively

What do you think?
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cloakedyoshi is not online. cloakedyoshi
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09 Jan 2014 10:52 PM
well continue with the stingers (sorry I haven't read the book in ages) and the escape
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PokemonEevee is not online. PokemonEevee
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09 Jan 2014 10:53 PM
i suck many things
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 10:54 PM
"What do you think?"

I honestly don't know. I don't know everything about everyone.
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 10:54 PM
@Refractively

lol just guess
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 10:55 PM
"lol just guess"

Middle school basic class.
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Zipo99 is not online. Zipo99
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09 Jan 2014 10:57 PM
Just wait until your junior year of high school when you will wish you only had to do reports. I have a project due in less than a week in which I have to read twenty articles from a single Associated Press author, annotate them, and then write a ten page rhetorical analysis on them. I also, for the same class, have to write a Toulmin argumentative essay on whether King Lear (from the book King Lear) is insane, stressed, or sick due to the Storm.

Juggling a lot of other school assignments as well. Don't complain.
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 10:59 PM
"Middle school basic class."

Yeah. The only subject I am much above standards in is math...
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 11:01 PM
"Yeah. The only subject I am much above standards in is math..."

I'm only in pre-AP English and AP World History. I would count pre-AP German, but I'm not going to continue with it.

Would you like some tips?
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Zipo99 is not online. Zipo99
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09 Jan 2014 11:03 PM
Sorry if I sound as if I am complaining. I'm drowning a little bit. Time to get off Roblox.
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 11:04 PM
Sure...

To be honest, i'm really bad at anything that requires you to write out something like an essay or just a book report.

I've been told my grammar is pretty good though
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MrIPwnyou is not online. MrIPwnyou
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09 Jan 2014 11:08 PM
This is what i wrote, i had the same essay.

may contain spoilers

Thomas is brought into a place known as the Glade with no previous memories of his life or the outside world. He and the 50 other teenage boys inside the Glade call themselves Gladers, and they have developed a community in which every Glader is assigned to his own job. The Glade is surrounded by a giant Maze where vicious creatures known as Grievers roam at night. Massive walls known as the Doors surrounding the Glade protect the Gladers from these creatures by sliding closed every night.
Each week supplies are brought to the Glade and once a month a new boy is sent up through an elevator known as the Box. The day after Thomas is brought to the Glade, a girl is sent with a message claiming she is the "last one". A girl has never been brought in before and the Gladers are excited and confused by her unexpected arrival. Immediately after arriving, the girl falls into a coma.
Meanwhile, Thomas learns more about the Glade. He learns that the Gladers have been trying to solve the Maze for two years and that the Grievers sting can cause you to recall memories from the past. The process is painstaking and is dreaded by other gladers. He feels oddly connected to the new girl and also befriends a young and enthusiastic (if slightly annoying) Glader named Chuck. He also befriends a boy called Newt. On the other hand, he strikes up a somewhat negative relationship with Gally, who thinks suspiciously of Thomas and claims that he has seen him, after he was stung by a Griever, in a process known as the Changing. Thomas also feels an inexplicable urge to be a Runner, the people who explore, map out, and try to find a way out of the Maze.
One day, one Runner and the "leader of the Glade", Minho and Alby return late from the job. Alby has been stung by a Griever and the two fail to make it back before the Doors close. On a whim, Thomas runs to join them in the Maze. After Minho tells them to split up and runs away, leaving Thomas with an unconscious Alby, Thomas proves he is more than capable of being a Runner by not only saving Alby from the Grievers but also tricking the Grievers into falling off the edge of the Maze, known as the Cliff, with the help of Minho who gave him the idea. Minho also realises Thomas could be the best Runner they have and the two become good friends.
Shortly after Thomas is officially made a Runner and the two find a transparent hole which leads to what Thomas calls the Griever Hole. Gally also goes missing around this time. After returning to the Glade, Thomas is shocked to hear the girl speaking telepathically to him in his head. He realizes her name is Teresa and she tells him she has "triggered the Ending". Soon afterwards, Teresa wakes up from the coma and finds Thomas. The two begin to talk and realize they feel connected to each other in a way that is close to remembering their lives before the Glade. The same day Teresa wakes up, the sky turns a dull grey colour. Thomas realises that it must be fabricated by the Creators who put them in the Glade. That night, the Doors do not close, meaning the Gladers are completely unprotected from the Grievers.
After Alby has gone through the Changing, he talks about the outside world and how it is far worse than any of them could imagine. The Gladers go into a state of siege and Gally returns in a hysterical state, telling the Gladers that one of them will die every night. After the Grievers enter the Glade, Gally throws himself onto one of them and the Grievers retreat. It is also discovered that all the Maps of the Maze made by the Runners over the past two years have been burned. Thomas is discouraged as he and Teresa had had an idea about the maps revealing a code, allowing the Gladers to find a way out of the maze. After Thomas voices his distress at the maps being burnt, Newt and Minho tell him that they hid the Maps in the Weapons Room in case something like this happened and that they left decoys. With Teresa, Minho and Newt’s help, Thomas finds a code in the Maps, but they are all unsure of how to use it.
In desperation for answers, Thomas decides that he must be stung by a Griever to use any memories revealed in the Changing. When he wakes up after the Changing he realises that the Maze was never meant to be solved, but that they have all been placed in a kind of experiment by the Creators to test their strength. He tells the other Gladers that they need to go down the Griever Hole and enter the code in a computer in the Hole. After some deliberation, most of the Gladers decide to go through with the plan and after preparing, they enter the Maze for what they hope is the last time.
Upon reaching the Hole, they realize that the Grievers are waiting for them. Alby sacrifices himself, thinking that if only one person is taken it will be enough for one night, but his plan fails and the Gladers attack the Grievers while Thomas, Teresa and Chuck attempt to get to the Hole. They eventually get through and Teresa enters the code while Thomas and Chuck fend off the Grievers. After entering the code, the Grievers are shut down and the remaining Gladers join them. Over half of them were killed.
A door opens at the end of the Hole and the Gladers, including Thomas, Teresa, Chuck, Minho, Newt and a few others exit through it to find the Creators. A woman comes to greet the Gladers, but the Gladers feel hostile towards her for putting them through the test. She is joined by a hooded figure who is revealed to be Gally, and as a final part of the test he pulls out a knife from his pocket and throws it at Thomas. Before he can react, Chuck throws himself in front of Thomas and with his dying words he asks Thomas to find his mother. Thomas attacks Gally before breaking down in tears and feeling overwhelming guilt, since he had promised Chuck he would get him back to his family.
Suddenly, a group of armed people who Thomas can only call rescuers rush into the building and attack the Creators. The leader tells the Gladers they have no time to explain but asks them to follow him to a bus. Before he can get on, a crazed woman grabs Thomas and mentions the Flare, but she is dragged away. Thomas gets on the bus and the leader runs the woman over in cold blood. The Gladers are taken to dormitory where they are fed and are given a comfortable safe haven for the time being.

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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 11:12 PM
Dang
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 11:13 PM
Yeah, honestly this year has made me hate English so I do not like writing essays at all.

Anyways, for the most part it's pretty decent. However, your sentences are a bit short and choppy, such as the intro. If this tip helps, 'When revising, read the essay out loud, listening for places where the writing seems awkward.' -classroom

Try combining some sentences, like this, 'The author of The Maze Runner is James Dashner, who is also the creator of other great series such as The 13th Reality.'

Small edits like this can help with the flow of your phrases, making them easier to understand.


Also, I wouldn't start off this sentence the way you have, 'Basically the story is about Thomas, a newcomer to the Glade, coming only knowing his first name.'

I'd try something like, 'The beginning of the book opens with our main character Thomas, who arrives at the Glade only knowing his first name.' [I've never read this book so sorry if that's wrong.]

And if you can, try getting a parent or peer to edit your paper once it's done. Trust me, outside edits can really help.
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 11:16 PM
Sounds like a good idea
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 11:17 PM
That really helped btw.
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 11:17 PM
"Sounds like a good idea"

I'd post websites with tips but then I'd be banned. You could always try Googling some advice if you need to.

Good luck on your report.
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MrIPwnyou is not online. MrIPwnyou
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09 Jan 2014 11:21 PM
As long as it is safe, it should be allowed. I don't get banned when I post safe links.
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Refractively is not online. Refractively
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09 Jan 2014 11:23 PM
"That really helped btw."

Glad I could help.

"As long as it is safe, it should be allowed. I don't get banned when I post safe links."

I really don't feel like risking it.

And I'm gonna go to sleep also, so goodnight OT.
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Pexur is not online. Pexur
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09 Jan 2014 11:23 PM
Hmm
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pwner195 is not online. pwner195
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09 Jan 2014 11:27 PM
what

OT is actually helping someone


and not bashing them


what happened here
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