WannaBet
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| 27 Dec 2013 04:08 AM |
This is only a rough draft I started working on.
The concept is based off on V for Vandetta.
The story takes place in Viridia; a nation dominated by narrow minded leaders of the who believed that in order to end war, greed, and misery, society must be forced into submission through the complete restriction of freedoms. A group of people known as the Nightfall Clan initially begin as a terror unit; assassinating figures responsible of establishing oppressive policies and exploding anything with symbolic significance (i.e. propaganda statues, parliament building, etc).
Worried that the clan may inspire others to follow in its footsteps, government officials capture a Nightfall member and broadcast his torture hoping to strike fear into the hearts of the nations' citizens. However, the outcomes is quite the opposite. Although the clan continues to consist of a few true members, citizen masses dedicate themselves to the nightfall movement in hopes of reestablishing liberty and prosperity in their homeland.
The setting takes place in the year of 2050, and is based off on a civil war outbreak between the Nightfall movement (controlled by the Nightfall Clan) and the fascist state of Viridia; led by the Wessianslaw Party.
RANKS: 1. The Viridian People 2. Fist 3. Trigger 4. Devote 5. Enforcer 6. Chieftain
[NIGHTFALL MEMBERS] 7. Disciple 8. Silencer 9. Champion
(Diplomat) // Affiliate
(HR) 10. Vangaurd 11. Speaker (those who speak & suggest) 12. Listener (those who listen & select) 13. Chancellor
Anything I could do to improve this // make it more thematic? |
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| 27 Dec 2013 04:09 AM |
| yoooo i was with you guys when you raided TD!! |
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WannaBet
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| 27 Dec 2013 04:10 AM |
oh hello elexa
What do you guys think about this? Anything I could do to improve it? |
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WannaBet
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| 27 Dec 2013 04:12 AM |
crap, I just realized it's 5 AM.
I'm off to bed.
I'll repost a better version of this without any grammatical errors tomorrow. |
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| 27 Dec 2013 06:57 AM |
| we need more knights and paladins |
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funfun99
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| 27 Dec 2013 07:45 AM |
| I think this sounds great WB, your a genius for thinking this up! |
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Allocated
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| 27 Dec 2013 07:54 AM |
the coleslaw party?
♜ Allocated the Pharmacist - Mario's the bomb - imitater's the imitator - sniper always misses |
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| 27 Dec 2013 07:55 AM |
"V for Vandetta."
I giggled |
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MrEpic9
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| 27 Dec 2013 09:17 AM |
I honestly am fine with this idea as long as the current HRs can keep their current rank after this idea pulls through. ~LG679 |
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Europe123
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| 27 Dec 2013 11:36 AM |
| Sounds 100% awesome and clearly majestic. The ranks we came up with fits well with those. |
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| 27 Dec 2013 01:16 PM |
| I think this is a great a concept! A lot we can work with here. |
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Tesana
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| 27 Dec 2013 01:21 PM |
PLOT HOLE
NFC uses swords and is a joke when it comes to guns, and they're in 2050 They wouldn't get anything done.
I still don't like NFC even with this very cliche back-story |
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WannaBet
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| 27 Dec 2013 03:22 PM |
@Strongly ButthurtMan
Oh this is cliche? Name me one superclan that uses this background which makes it so generic, I'd love to hear something constructive come out of your mouth.
And by the way, this is a very simple prototype that I drafted out at 5 am while deprived of my sleep. Its full of grammatical errors and nowhere near as elaborate or appealing as it would be once completed.
-- As for everyone else, your positive comments and suggestions are helpful, thank you for advocating this positive change.
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Tesana
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| 27 Dec 2013 07:39 PM |
| It's just a resistance movement against an over-controlling government. There is NOTHING original about that. |
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WannaBet
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| 27 Dec 2013 07:59 PM |
haha, that's the broad concept that doesn't go over the details, and even in its broad state not a single superpower has this.
If it weren't for detail, star wars and V for Vandetta would've been identical. :) |
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Azureous
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| 27 Dec 2013 08:01 PM |
@Tesana name one clan that actually uses this as their background storyline?
Exactly, because everybody thinks: Oh that's generic, but wait it isn't. |
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| 27 Dec 2013 10:29 PM |
Needs more... Nightfall.. Clan...ness
-I'm an agent of chaos.- |
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