Silyonix
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| 19 Dec 2013 03:32 PM |
kids in my class are assigned to make a new book or a new series and read it to the class every friday, and I need some 12 year olds opinions, because i'm not reading it to my class, i'm reading it to the 7th graders here it is
The Epidemic
Book One: A New Foe
(Screeching) As John Murtov woke up from the horrible nightmare, he heard screeching. It was 1:48 AM, and he had no form of defense on him. The only option he had was to abandon his post...
(Survival Log)
“This is John Murtov. I was forced to abandon my post when I noticed screechers coming in at my six, I have been running for hours now and I found this shelter. I just hope no one followed me.”
He closed his book, stayed up for a couple hours and than had a nap. But the nap didn't last long... He heard a Boomer's explosive going off, so he had to run more...
(5 Years ago at a emergency meeting hosted by the government)
President Obama: Citizens, it is my duty to warn you of an un-escapable epidemic that has been taking place across the world for some time now. We recently found Screechers in a forest 5,00 miles from here, and we're afriad this epidemic has spread to both Canada, and the United Stated of America. Washington DC is being evacuated as we speak by the authoritys. Boomers have devestated three towns so far, the only safe place to go now is underwated”...
(Back to John Murtov's Time)
(Survival Log)
Found a abandoned Mine Shaft, and I have found more refugees. We have heard no sign of Screechers or Boomers, but we have heard many Wall Crawlers. Some ex-military police have scouted out more of the Mineshaft, and we're beginning to worry they won't come back....”John Murtov is a 31 year old male. He has dark brown hair, and blue eyes. “You guys remember the time Obama acknowledged the epidemic?” Stacy Rum asked. The gang nodded. When only one of the Military Police Agents came back running and sweating, the small gang of refugee knew they were in trouble when thye saw a horde of Wall Crawlers right behind him. When they ditched the Mine Shaft, the ammount of Wall Crawlers started to abate. They stopped running for a while, because they knew all that was left would not attack a large group of refugees. But when they started to close in, John Murtov panicked, he tried to estimate how many there were, and by the looks of things, they were in trouble. When he finally had the precise ammount of Wall Crawlers, he whispered to everyone that they needed to start running. “At this point, it's suicide to even think about running right now, remember, these things are human, they can understand us.” Military Policeman Glen Show whispered back. “The best thing to do is show we're not frightened, and just walk, if they notice we're scared, they'll know they can take us.”
His observation was a sham, the Wall Crawlers knew they could take them. When one of them jumped on Stacy Rum, Stacy kicked it away and they had to face facts.... they needed to run. As they sprinted they saw a train, a moving train. Their only hope was to jump on that train and hope there was nothing else in it. As they caught up to one of the open carts, Glen Show helped everyone on. But just as he was about to jump on, he was taken by the Wall Crawlers. “NO!” John Murtov shouted in horror. John Murtov, Stacy Rum, Mable Spaw, Tristan Bryer, and Brendon Law were the only refugees left.
(Survival Log of Stacy Rum) Night has fell upon us and I have been chosen for first guard duty. We heard Screechers nearby a couple of hours ago, and the screeching seems to be getting louder. If I don't write in this again and someone finds it, we are heading to White Beach, that's the only safe place on the entire earth at this point.”
She closed her log and continued guarding the refugees on board. When Tristan Bryer saw an approaching Screecher, he yelled, instantly waking everyone up. The Screecher was running at an extremely fast pace, and he seemed to be infuriated. When he got close he dropped dead. The reason why he was angry was because he had seemed to be wacked in the head by something, which could only mean there were other survivors in the area. They looked around, and suddenly, they saw a large group of survivors running out of the forest directly across from them, with a multitude of Boomers running after them. As the small group of Refugees watched the Bommer's Explosives mow down the survivors, they tried to help. And within 1 minute, 3 quarters of those Survivors was gone, just like that. The remaining 15 survivors jumped on the train. But, Brendan Law was black, and one of those survivors hated africans. He started to walk towards Brendan Law, and kicked him in the shin and tried to throw him off the train! Luckily, John Murtov was there to prevent that. John shouted at that survivor and said “On this trek, partiality is not tolerated! You're either impartial, or you're out of here!” The partial survivor, James Michigan was not pleased, but was forced to accept the terms and conditions of the group of refugees.
(John Murtov's Survival Log)
It's finally light out, and we now have a bird's eye view of anything and anyone who is inbound. We should be safe for the time being.”
He closed the survival log, and noticed Tristan Bryer acting rather strange. “Tristan? Tristan! Are you okay!?” John asked in concern. “Yeah.. It's just that, what happened to those boomers chasing the survivors?” At that point, no one had thought of that. “It's okay,” Stacy said “We lost them hours ago.” She knew that something was wrong, because she used to stuy the creatures, and knew they wouldn't let any survivors go, besides Wall Crawlers who make that acception. She started to look around, when she saw something running in the forest, she could just smell the Gun Power in those explosives. “We NEED to jump off this train..” Stacy admit. “Why?” Brendan asked “NOW!” Stacy was the first to jump, along witht he other 19 survivors, but when James Michigan was slow to react, the Train Car exploded with him in it. The group of Survivors ran, and when another Explosive was tossed, 3 survivors were gone. They finally found a bomb shelter after 5 minutes of running, and knew they were one hundred percent safe. “As long as we make no sounds, the Boomers will walk away. When it comes to hunting, they are not industrious at all.” But right at that moment, Stacy was pulled out by a Screecher, and was gone...
(To be Continued in Book Two) |
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Silyonix
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| 19 Dec 2013 03:35 PM |
| i know i know, spelling mistakes and tl;dr. but this is rough draft and i will eventually fix the spelling mistakes |
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FELlNE
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bibbs123
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| 19 Dec 2013 03:42 PM |
| i would help but 5 years too old |
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ddee222
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| 19 Dec 2013 03:45 PM |
| depends, are you talking the autistic socially awkward 12 y/o (aka the norm) or some average human beings? |
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| 19 Dec 2013 03:47 PM |
| I'm to lazy to read just read the first paragraph but it's good. |
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