sly115
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| 29 Nov 2013 02:00 PM |
Darkness, and iron, they both filled her senses, something was in her mouth, but the strap was too hard that she couldn't spit it out. she had been in the room for a few hours, she had tried to wriggle and struggle out of the 6 straps on the first few minutes of being conscious, But her strength was low and the strap's thick, and his attempt, useless. He had been in a complete sense of dread from the very beginning. All she could see was an ancient looking tv in front of her, showing a man on a table, much like in the situation she was in but not strapped down. She looked up as far as she could, behind the darkness. A man could be enveloped, and she wouldn't know. The tv then switched off. Making the room,surrounded in complete darkness. she started to panic, she was certain things were crawling on her, insects maybe, No, too hard of a touch. He was swiveled round like lighting, a big pair of beady black eyes staring at her, A pair of gloves, much like a ringmaster would own, and a brightly coloured orange suit. It had sevral noticeable stains, Of all colours and shapes, But the most noticeable thing about him was his smile, it was a switching grin, his smile widening as samantha strained her eyes to look up.
His hand was like a whip as he ripped off the leather strap, not bothering to unbuckle it. Samantha was spitting out the crimson liquid as she noticed him staring into her eyes, but deeper, even deeper than her very soul. She shot her head left and right as footsteps approached and the doors swung open.
Part 1 ( http://web.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=118912237 )
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| 30 Nov 2013 03:33 AM |
| Starting to post on threads on page 2. |
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minimite
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| Joined: 27 Sep 2008 |
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| 30 Nov 2013 03:23 PM |
@above 'Writers of Robox' uuuuuhhhhh
anyways dan ouda dan |
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| 30 Nov 2013 11:02 PM |
Good story, it just needs a slight bit of proof reading but it's very good. I especially liked when you described the blood as crimson.
@Min Got something to say, say it. |
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| 30 Nov 2013 11:07 PM |
| Its good but I was so confused with the she/he thing. Maybe try to stick with one gender. ;3 |
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