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| 12 Nov 2013 12:00 AM |
SMASH TO:
EXT. LOUISIANA SWAMP - DAWN
The camera swerves through trees and bushes as if it were a bird. It follows a stream to a bridge and stops.
SMASH TO BLACK:
BEGIN TITLES
FADE IN:
We see an unidentifiable MAN walk across the bridge and follow a path which leads to an old tavern of sorts. Inside he sees MARIO, the bar tender.
MARIO Hi, name's Mario. Friends call me Mar. What can I do you for?
MAN I am here from out of town. I was aware you had quite the specials to offer.
MARIO Sure do. Best damn gumbo in the south.
MAN I mean your other specials.
The two stare at each other momentarily until a door slams open and reveals ARMAND VERNON.
ARMAND Then you want to talk to me.
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| 12 Nov 2013 12:11 AM |
CUT TO:
ARMAND handing the MAN a brown bag. The MAN gladly walks out of the tavern.
MARIO turns to ARMAND.
MARIO How do you get the ingredients for that crap anyway?
ARMAND pauses.
FLASHBACK:
Check My Brain by Alice In Chains plays as -
ARMAND is shown slamming an axe wildly into animals and people alike. Screams echo throughout the forest.
ARMAND is shown making fine powders out of their bones and mixing it together with the strangest of chants.
ARMAND finishes making the drug with an eerie chant.
PRESENT:
ARMAND unpauses.
ARMAND None of your damn business, Mar. Now get back to selling that gumbo before it stinks up the place.
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| 12 Nov 2013 12:12 AM |
Made a typo.
"strangest of chemicals" not chants. =x |
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| 12 Nov 2013 12:16 AM |
Not bad.
But what did the man pay Vernon? |
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| 12 Nov 2013 05:00 PM |
I love how no one cares to respond to the actual screenplay but when people just post what characters they want to be that'll get like two pages.
Makes sense. |
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| 12 Nov 2013 05:17 PM |
| it seems a bit candid for horror, but whatevs man |
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| 12 Nov 2013 05:18 PM |
it seems more like a parody of horror but what do i know |
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| 12 Nov 2013 05:23 PM |
The story ultra came up with was more or less horror.
However im also going to add in a 60s/70s thriller/cop/action feel by switching ultra's role around. Sorry, ultra, but it works better. He and swift will be two detectives entering not only the drug underworld but the voodoo one as well.
Swift & Crash. Best detective names ever, am I right? |
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| 12 Nov 2013 06:10 PM |
this is so awesome
like words cant describe how excited I am right now |
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| 12 Nov 2013 06:42 PM |
David Dorfman ... Mario
Angus Sutherland ... Armand
That's the cast so far as no other major characters have been introduced as of yet. |
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| 12 Nov 2013 09:59 PM |
(V.O.) CRASH Hey, turn that music down. Giving me an earache.
(V.O.) SWIFT An earache? That's a new one. Most people just say headache.
FADE IN:
INT. CAR INTERIOR - DAY
CRASH Yeah, well I'm- Hey, stop the car. I think I see someone!
SWIFT pulls the car over on the side of the road and the two quickly get out.
SWIFT What the hell?
Crash is already checking his pulse.
CRASH He's dead. No visible wounds or injuries.
SWIFT Stroke or heart attack, maybe?
CRASH Don't know. Might be connected to our case.
SWIFT Overdose?
CRASH Don't know. But like I said, might be connected to our case. Come on, help me get him off the road.
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:03 PM |
I'm bursting with excitement.
But wooop, I control the radio! |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:06 PM |
I should have also written down that they saw a body before Crash checks the pulse. Also that the body is the same guy who bought the bag of stuff in the opening.
Also working on picking out actors for you two. |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:08 PM |
Logan Marshall-Green ... Crash
Michael Fassbender ... Swift |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:11 PM |
Jared Padalecki as Detective Crash Jensen Ackles as Detective Swift
Or something.
Also if a girl is introduced.
Gillian Anderson-as girl. |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:15 PM |
| Wait the other ones you just picked are great too. |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:15 PM |
| Wait atleast take SCULLY!!! |
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| 12 Nov 2013 10:17 PM |
Just a quick change to ultra's.
Jon Bernthal |
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| 13 Nov 2013 05:07 AM |
| I do don't I? This is awesome. |
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