AM0LED
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| 14 Nov 2013 08:03 AM |
The title is "Between Hello & Goodbye", and so I thought that it's a good topic for a romance novel.
The restriction is 1500 words, and the storyline is as follows:
David and Ellen is together, Ellen is David's childhood best friend and has become more than friends. However, David then has to go to Italy (Venice, specifically) for a school trip regarding historical art, and meets Celia, who looks like his mother (who is long gone), and to Celia, David looks like her father (who is, coincidentally long gone too), and [I'm not sure what happens in this moment] (Love at first sight? Gradual love? Help me pls) David and Celia likes each other, just as David have to go back to England, where he would meet his dying girlfriend, Ellen. Ellen says to David on her deathbed, "Promise me you'll find another," and after some time, David goes back to Italy and to Celia. At this time (ending), Ellen's brother watches, which makes David guilty for not saying he fell in love with Celia without telling her and that he can't say sorry to her since she's already dead.
Help pls. - How did Ellen die? (still not sure, but need it to be so that she has to lay in bed and say her final words to David) - How did Celia and David meet? (still not sure about this one idk) - How should the novel start? - How should the novel end?
Thanks in advance, |
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| 14 Nov 2013 09:04 AM |
"David and Ellen is together"
"Is together"
"is"
Well I hope they is having fun, and they is loving eachother.
First of all, romance is one of the worst subjects you could've picked, why?
Because it's pure crappines and no one is willing to read it, but whateva.
Ellen should die from being gang attacked in an ally so that David feels more sorry.
David and Celia should meet when David knocks her over accidentally when he is running to catch the bus.
The novel should start with Davids perfect life in London.
It should end with everyone dying (no joke) David starts getting depressed and in the final end when Celia is leaving david because she thinks he doesn't love her she changes her mind and gets hit by a car.
David sees what happens and after a couple of days he walks over to a bridge and kills himself after a couple of days. |
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| 14 Nov 2013 09:13 AM |
It should be like this.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vlqihBfKzDM |
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| 14 Nov 2013 09:35 AM |
| Should make the story spooky. |
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AM0LED
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| 14 Nov 2013 10:12 AM |
I appreciate all the replies, but unfortunately, it's gonna have to be a "short-story", as its restricted to 1500 words. I'll happily write more, but I can't right now.
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| 14 Nov 2013 10:20 AM |
| Well at least it don't have to be a long story. |
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AM0LED
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| 14 Nov 2013 11:30 AM |
| No, that's bad because I can't fit in what I want to write lol. |
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:29 PM |
i think romance is best as a subplot not necessarily as the driving force in a story |
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rose6666
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:40 PM |
Turn it into a horror story. Like Ellen is dying under mysterious circumstances, and suddenly David meets Cecilia, who coincidentally seems like a perfect match for him since they both have dead parents and remind each other of them.
It turns out that Cecilia is a Succubus, and planned everything. At the end, David finds a way to get Ellen out of Cecilia's trance and save her by reading out a ritual. But, just as David arrives at the hospital, Cecilia takes over David's mind and forces him to smother Ellen.
David wakes up out of his trance, and sees Cecilia in her demonic form standing in front of him. David runs at her with a doctor's scalpel, but she vanishes into thin air and plummets out of the hospital's window, thanks to the succubus' strategically placed position.
David falls to his death, and the Succubus stands over him, looking at his shattered skull, while bystanders rush over to the body, seeming to not see the demon among them.
I have a good plot twist for this if you want to hear it. |
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:47 PM |
you had me up until succubus |
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rose6666
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:49 PM |
| What's bad about a succubus? |
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:50 PM |
it's a stupid plot twist and ive seen it a lot |
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rose6666
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:51 PM |
| Ah, but you didn't hear the REAL plot twist. |
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| 14 Nov 2013 04:55 PM |
and it was all a dream! i wouldve stopped reading at succubus anyway |
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rose6666
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| 14 Nov 2013 05:02 PM |
That's a terrible plot twist.
Plot Twist: David was driven mad by his dying girlfriend, so made up a world where he had some hope that he could save her. He really did meet Cecilia, but he drowned her in her bath. David then returned to England, having the belief that a spell could help Ellen. The painful truth was, was that David couldn't save her. This caused him to kill Ellen and then kill himself, knowing he has nothing to live for. |
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rose6666
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| 14 Nov 2013 05:12 PM |
| I know, I was carrying on the sarcasm. |
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| 14 Nov 2013 10:55 PM |
| well good luck explaining it all in a short story. |
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