Vyzen
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:16 PM |
As the last remaining inhabitants of the star of Procyon, it is in our hearts to relive the greatness created during the prime of our star. Years ago, we were forced to abandon our home planet of Procyon due to an immense raid issued by The Vaktovian Empire. Our planet was left in despair as we were able to retreat but without the consequence of little supplies. Reduced greatly in numbers, our few soldiers had nothing left apart from our emergency personalized Combat Swords, that they are ordered to keep on them at all times. Our remaining citizens were set on route to a nearby planet by the name of Earth. Regardless of the weapons used against us, our elite soldiers we able to fend off the oncoming raiders from the outside colonies.
Desperate for supplies to feed our members in need and to further supply our struggling soldiers, an all-out attack was issued on an abandoned base formerly owned by a military named RAID. With scattered mercenaries inside the base and little plans for defense, our elites proved themselves to be greatly superior as they cleared out the base with great success. As we took refugee inside the base, we further developed our skills with our Combat Swords. For nearly 100 years, our soldiers had lived blood-free, living in peace from the outside colonies unaware of who was inside of the old military base.
While our society rebuilt itself and began to function as it once did, a soldier by the name of Vyzen was elected to lead this great society. The new emperor was immensely experienced in the arts of warfare, as well as leading. He led majority of the trainings, with the help from his hand selected crew.
After awhile, as the spirits of the base had flown extremely high, and majority of the soldiers never seeing real warfare in their lifetime, a large group of mercenaries attacked our society. Using long distance weaponry and the element of surprise to their advantage, the mercenaries were able to rattle our society as they slaughtered the undefended women and children who were not prepared for battle. As luck turned out, the many Conscripts of the base were in the midst of training for the elites, and were able to hold their ground against the incoming mercenaries. Although many of the new Conscripts survived, many of the children who were not attending trainings were unaware of what to do and passed away.
To increase our size and skill levels, our Emperor Vyzen chooses groups of Conscripts who would like to show off their talent to raid a nearby enemy facility hoping to gather supplies as well as to capture enemy soldiers and turn them to our own. When returned to our own base, the new soldiers are immediately trained to become elites in the art of close ranged combat.
As a peace treaty, our society was offered long ranged weaponry from a small colony named Cirago, which our Commanders accepted. Due to our colonies skill with short ranged weponry, the weaponry gained from Cirago is restricted to all higher ranked troops. The weapons are weak and not always trustable, but prove to be useful in some situations.
After a successful raid on a nearby colony, our troops received word of a large group that had taken refugee in the icy wastelands. Many of our high commanding troops were sent to the wastelands, determined to arrange an agreement with the talked about colony. The colony was indeed large, and had immense skill. Due to the amount of refugees, a treaty was proposed in effort to keep our society from another oncoming attack. The colony was named Frigid, and survived best in icy conditions. To complete the treaty, Frigid requested that our society sent over frequent patrols to their land in order to further defend themselves from incoming raids.
As orders from the Emperor, soon all of the unskillful and unloyal soldiers will be placed into exile from our colony. Regardless of this, Procyon is currently maintaining a strong army of 200 soldiers. Many of the soldiers are not the elites they can be, but are edging close to completing their training to become a true Procyon elite.
[Written by Dynamite2787] [Story line created by Vyzen]
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:30 PM |
"left apart from our emergency personalized Combat Swords"
Fixed the spelling mistake from "let" to "left", as well as switched "P-68" to "personalized" |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:37 PM |
| And it still doesn't adress how absolutely illogical it is. Top. |
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:41 PM |
Is this base on a true story? Is this supposed to be nonfiction? Is this happening in the real world? NO
It may be illogical, but we're here to have fun, not be as realistic as possible. This is a fiction RP for our group. We're not here to comply with real life. So please leave. |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:50 PM |
| Then don't make up some illogical story. |
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:55 PM |
| Have you ever read any books. Watched movies? You're really ignorant if you think a story has to be logical. |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 10:59 PM |
I do read books, I guarantee more than you (I read A LOT, that's not to insult you). I also write, A LOT.
Stories do follow logic. Sci-fi is either completely science based or exists in a way of pseudo-science. I adore pseudo-science, and adore making things up. But... This is too much. It has to have too many things altered abd assumed to even begin to have a base.
Sci-fi sword clans just can't have a LEGITIMATE lore, it doesn't work. |
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:07 PM |
| hmm lets see. Here is just one example though I can list much more. A knife in the book .The Subtle Knife. is a small knife that can cut through giant slabs of metal with no resistance. Tell me how that is more logical then armor blocking bullets? |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:10 PM |
Because it is fantasy.
Not a derranged form of sci-fi. |
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:13 PM |
they are both something that doesnt exist
inysa youd think that since you consider yourself one of the best writers on roblox youd be able to keep up with make-belief |
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:17 PM |
| I'm just wondering how you consider bulletproof armor (which they even have today..) deranged sci-fi. |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:17 PM |
Fantasy and sci-fi are completely different. Sci-fi has some form of pseudo-science, and the plot and universe is always rational and "yes, that couls happen if this existed". Fantasy is... Well, fantasy. Your clan is undeniable sci-fi.
So basically, for your lore to happen, it requires everybody in the lore to be an absolute moron to the point a chimp would be smarter. I've already explained why.
I'm done with you lot; I highly reccomend a SERIOUS overhaul of this. |
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Inysa
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:18 PM |
| Bulletproof armour is easy. It's bullet-but-not-blade proof that is asinine. |
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Falcade
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| 05 Nov 2013 11:24 PM |
| Alright, good riddance. If you actually read though, I explained it was blade proof, but there are certain weak spots you can hit it in. Same thing with guns. I just made this as a possible explanation because apparently you had nothing better to do then complain that this is "illogical" |
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Cirvius
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Komnenos
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| 13 Nov 2013 10:11 AM |
| So all I have to do to kill all of you is come in with an automatic pulse rifle |
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Vyzen
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| 13 Nov 2013 10:12 AM |
| That wouldn't be possible. |
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