goof333
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| 05 Oct 2013 02:52 AM |
But pretends to love me so I wont find out.
They say I am the best, the favorite one.
But I know something they are not telling me, I can see it in there eyes as they speak.
Snakes in the grass. Cold and twofaced, with masks of false emotions and deceitful reassurance of hopes and dreams they long ago have abandoned.
Lingering resentfulness, just under the skin. Well hidden but not out of sight for one who knows what to look for.
They are no longer real, no longer conscious of others, no presence but themselves.
Books collecting dust on the top shelf, stories unfinished, the author of lost wills and unfulfilled ideas.
Blank pages that say so much but mean absolutely nothing. The worst of stories, full of fictional memories and fraudulent senses of accomplishment.
I can see through you, for what there is left to see, no matter how numerous the walls be that you have built around yourselves.
My eyes, the emerald green torches of suppressed youth, peering through the darkness within your own eyes. I can see you, what is left of your starving and neglected soul. |
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| 05 Oct 2013 02:53 AM |
your edginess gave me a paper cut
~Malevolence at it's finest~ |
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| 05 Oct 2013 02:53 AM |
k den
I like jumping up and down in muddy puddles |
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goof333
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| 05 Oct 2013 02:56 AM |
You both posted at the exact same time and right after I posted this.
This leads me to believe you didn't even read it.
:3
I wrote down the first thoughts that came into my sleep deprived mind, true to the heart.
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| 05 Oct 2013 02:59 AM |
I actually read quite fast so yeah
I like jumping up and down in muddy puddles |
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goof333
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| 05 Oct 2013 03:01 AM |
Did you like what you read?
I am practicing writing things that will evoke some emoting into the reader. :3
I am planning on writing a story over the summer, a bit early I know but I am practicing some skills I am a bit weak on. |
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goof333
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| 05 Oct 2013 03:03 AM |
Any feedback at all?
I would like to know if I need to improve on anything in what I just wrote.
:> |
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| 05 Oct 2013 03:04 AM |
| I never have emotions that show weakness |
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Ariate
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| 05 Oct 2013 03:47 AM |
tl;dr
Sorry, my processor can't handle noob 2.5 emo paragraphs, please try again later. |
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Tox666
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| 05 Oct 2013 03:48 AM |
| Wow, you're not depressing at all. |
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MushLakos
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| 05 Oct 2013 04:05 AM |
Get a virtual family. They'll love you better.
Russiaboo <3 |
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goof333
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| 05 Oct 2013 11:40 AM |
>youre adopted
I actually am :3
So no that isn't an insult.
HOORAY! This was meant to be depressing! :D I am getting better at writing stuff. :3
And for all you who don't seem to get this, It is false. Meant to evoke some sort of emotion in the reader. :> |
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