Agentdc14
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:07 PM |
(VERSE 1/T-ZERO) I'm boss I'm pure skill I'm complete shocking My raps own you Step back and read these lyrics Read carfully Now shut up, step back And enjoy the lyrics 'Cause they're an electric shock Going through you (CHORUS/T-ZERO) Mmhm Nothin' but electric Electric SHOCK 15trillion volts boltin' through you I'm electric mmhm Berzerk electric shock Mmhm Step back OR FEEL MY SHOCKING ELECTRIC SHOCK (VERSE 2/T-ZERO) Take these lyrics Make it your theme song Take the credit Be my pleasure Just be my guest and feel my shocking skill So please step back And have the real legion stand up AND MAKE SOME NOISE for that crowd Be a soldier And stand proud Make them feel your electrifying knowledge Now one last time Feel my electric shock (CHORUS/T-ZERO) Mmhm Nothin' but electric Electric SHOCK 15trillion volts boltin' through you I'm electric mmhm Berzerk electric shock Mmhm Step back OR FEEL MY SHOCKING ELECTRIC SHOCK
This song is dedicated to Electro Legion and hopefully they'll use it as a little theme song. Thanks for reading my lyrics! Please let me know what to change to make my raps better. Thanks! |
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ducky980
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:08 PM |
"I'm boss I'm pure skill I'm complete shocking My raps own you"
no your not and no they dont. |
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xpsm1530
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:09 PM |
| WHAT THE HELL IS THIS EVEN ABOUT? |
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ducky980
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:10 PM |
I just noticed none of it rhymed or matched 1.3/10 |
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Agentdc14
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:13 PM |
| Ducky, I do not rhyme. There is no rule saying "RHYME OR YOU SUCK". So I suggest you get some knowledge on my type of music. Thanks. |
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:14 PM |
well actually lyrics arent that good if they dont rhyme. lyrics are supposed to have some sort of rhyme and flow to it, yours doesnt. your basically just writing random sentences. |
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xpsm1530
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:15 PM |
"on my type of music."
WHAT THE HELL MAKES YOU THINK THIS IS MUSIC?
You just slapped together some poorly-made phrases and posted it on the Roblox forums. |
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Agentdc14
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:16 PM |
| Violet, you are just an annoying little hater that works my nerves. This is my kind of rap. If it bothers you, don't read it. |
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:18 PM |
lol 1. "this is my kind of rap" you realise no one would ever listen (or read) this and like it. 2. its not music, it boring it has no music put to it and you dont actually rap it your just writing lyrics.
im not a "hater", im giving advice and if you dont want to listen to it thats fine by me. |
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Agentdc14
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| 25 Sep 2013 03:26 PM |
| Dude, just shut up and quit hating. |
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| 25 Sep 2013 05:44 PM |
i'm sorry but just put some rhymes in
even if they're simple
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StellaOwl
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| 25 Sep 2013 07:44 PM |
| i love how OP puts this on the forum TO GET CRITICISM (the only thing you could expect when posting it on MT), and then gets all poed at anyone who doesnt like his "music" |
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MsDark
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| 25 Sep 2013 07:52 PM |
| I agree with what the other guys are saying mostly with the rhyming thing, but I feel the bigger problem you're having is writing the lyrics in general. Just remember not to force yourself into thinking of the lyrics without knowing what to sing to first. |
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| 25 Sep 2013 07:54 PM |
this is so terrible it's shocking
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