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| 19 Aug 2013 11:37 AM |
Ok, so i am writing this book. The Telepathic Rebel, and I need help. Help with Roleplaying here and I will use it in my book. Help will be greatly apprecaited.
I CHOOSE WHO IS IN THE STORY ROLEPLAYING AND THEY WILL BE LISTED ON A LATER POST! ANYONE ESLE IGNORE FOR NOW!.
This is what its about: "In the future, telepaths provide the only way to send faster than light messages across the vastness of space. Anyone with the gift is forced to work for the Government Office of Interplanetary Communication, but one young girl rebels…"
This is what I have so far:
Chapter 1:
"This... Is where your training starts. An explanation of where, what, and why will be given after the first course." The room says. "Test subject #1, Here are your instructions." Do not worry, you are not the only test subject here." The room states, leaving me to figure out how everything works. "Where am I?" I ask. I get no response. I look around the room. There is the bed from where I woke up, a small window, and a door. Everything is white or in some shade of white. I look at me. I am in a full white outfit. No shoes. My turn around. I catch glimpse of my hair. Gold, silver, and chocolate brown. Beautiful. I walk over to a closet I didn't notice before. Its unlocked. I open it to find a key on the second shelf. I try it on the door. It doesn't fit. I carry it around trying to figure out where it would work. The closet shelves? No. The window? No. I sit on the bed to think when I see the floor. Under the bed is a trap door. I try the key. Yes. It unlocks to a ladder going down into blackness.
Chapter 2:
When I reach the bottom, all I see is a long, dark hallway. I start walking. The floor is cold under my feet. I know I've reached the end before I see it. The walls beside me suddenly open up and I'm faced with a bunch of kids. No, not kids. The youngest maybe 12, the oldest 15. I suddenly see they are all girls. I take my gaze off of the people and rest my eyes on the room. Again, all white. The only difference is the girls hair. Black, brown, blonde. I am the only one with tri-colored hair. I go to the one who seems in charge. Ordering others around. I know were not going to be friends when I see her. She looks about the same of everyone else, long black hair, tall, except her stare. As she walks over, the walls speak again. "Hello Test Subjects. As of now, you will no longer receive anymore contributors. That is all." As soon as the walls finish. The girl walking toward me stops. She looks up, then yells. "What do you mean? We have been waiting for hours. When is number 1 going to get here?". I realize, I'm #1. She looks at me. "I'm #2. So since #1 isn't here..." She says. "I'm the leader." I don't say anything. "What number are you?" She asks. Before I can respond the walls talk again. "#2 please escort everyone to The Room. Thank you." She rolls her eyes. "Ok, sure. Whatever. Since you wont tell us anything." She leads everyone to the only door in the big room. I'd say there are about 100 other girls here. Some hesitate to follow, but there's nowhere to else to go.
Chapter 3: She opened the door and we were all confused. It was a long hallway with doors on both sides so close, the rooms must only be a few feet wide. It took time for us to realize you go in the door with your number, I know we should have realized it sooner, but we didn't know why we were even here, let alone what to do in a weird hallway. Anyway, the girls started going in cautiously I waited until Drew had her back turned. I didn't want her to see me go in #1. But she always had her eye on me. I didn't know how I was ever going to get in before it was only me and her left. I big group of girls came in suddenly, and blocked her way. I ducked under them and went in my room. I quickly wished I hadn't.
___________________________________________________________________ This is as far as I got. Not every girl there gets chosen, and Im thinking of a showdown between #2 and #1. Like maybe they both tie and need to race or somthing. I dont know. I got writers block.
Post what you think. Also, does Anya (main Character) need a boyfriend later?
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LeMrTroll
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| 19 Aug 2013 11:50 AM |
| I think Anya needs to someone give her a slap in her face |
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| 19 Aug 2013 12:04 PM |
| I don't approve. Whatever. Think what you want. By the way, Thanks for your comment. (being sarcastic.) |
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| 19 Aug 2013 12:12 PM |
| You obviously dont know how writing works. |
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| 19 Aug 2013 12:15 PM |
| You obviously don't know how to read. Keep your mouth shut if you have nothing good to say. And yeah I know, that wasn't nice of me to say! |
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AlphaX10
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| 19 Aug 2013 12:17 PM |
>book
>chapters are only a few paragraphs
>the future of writing is bleak |
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| 19 Aug 2013 12:20 PM |
| Finally, someone who's not rude. Thanks, I try to update what I can. This is the most helpful anyones been. |
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:14 PM |
| OPINIONS R BAD RAGAHGAAHGA |
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buck10me
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:20 PM |
Bebi shut your mouth, shut it.
Can you be nice to someone for a change?
~ This is just a hobby, and my next objective is to flip off a hater ~ |
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:26 PM |
Why, why? Are you telling us it's human nature? |
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buck10me
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:26 PM |
@Bebi
If your cynical by nature, then **** you.
And for 4 years of ROBLOX, you've been screwing with everyone.
~ This is just a hobby, and my next objective is to flip off a hater ~ |
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:29 PM |
| Are you some kind of idiot? |
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buck10me
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:31 PM |
Well of course, but save your breath.
I was trying to spark up a arguement just so I can have entertainment.
But you want me to come in, start over again man?
~ This is just a hobby, and my next objective is to flip off a hater ~ |
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:31 PM |
Thanks. Sometimes you need more than one person to tell you that your mean. And you know that!
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buck10me
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:32 PM |
Jessie, you want to have some ice-cream with me and my friend?
We were going to talk about how stupid Bebi is.
~ This is just a hobby, and my next objective is to flip off a hater ~ |
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:48 PM |
Stupid is a strong word.
But I could easily call you a
http://www.youtube.com/watch?feature=player_detailpage&v=qycQeSltxnQ&t=5 |
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AlphaX10
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:50 PM |
| Bebi is the nicest person in the whole universe. |
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buck10me
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| 19 Aug 2013 01:53 PM |
You guys finished?
Can I go now?
~ This is just a hobby, and my next objective is to flip off a hater ~ |
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| 19 Aug 2013 02:33 PM |
You could've left for custard hours ago, only to get smeared by the good humour truck.
But sadly, you haven't left yet. |
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AlphaX10
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| 19 Aug 2013 02:49 PM |
| This could be considered the outline for the first three chapters, but I wouldn't consider a single paragraph a chapter. |
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| 19 Aug 2013 03:02 PM |
| well im writing this on a different website, watt then pad. it is a website but I cant say it. type in watt then pad and it will come up. I am JessieB3999. |
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LeMrTroll
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| 20 Aug 2013 09:53 AM |
| I think Anya needs a giant gun/sword/weapon,whack everybody,find a boyfriend that is going to be killed by someone,and then she will start to go rampaging in madness,killing everybody that she sees. |
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