Rellean
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| 12 Aug 2013 12:06 AM |
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zG4jJylXSF0
(Rella) A knife through anatomy- Debut alchemy Spoken clarity- Broken rarity My dexterity, a tool box- Drool spots On your shirt- Lyrical boar- Hit the floor Blood pours- On concrete steps Using discreet checks- And this buisness is next.
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(TheAlphaKing12) Rap God Orsirus/ a lyrical virus/ infecting your iris/ making a picture/ rhymes like a scripture/ No filter/ of a record company figure/ So ya better consider/ strikes deep like a blister/ hard to get through like a blizzard/ I'm a lyrical wizard/ with more rhymes in a mixture/ comebacks burn and only get crisper/
(Beat plays for 5 more seconds, than slowly fades.)
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| 12 Aug 2013 12:07 AM |
OYus.
Sweg to the Left Sweg to the right. yulu |
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Rellean
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| 12 Aug 2013 11:49 AM |
| Very nice, guys. It seems we have had a sudden influx of GOOD ro-rappers. |
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Rootling
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| 12 Aug 2013 11:53 AM |
| Big ups for punchlines, metaphors, and similes! |
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| 12 Aug 2013 12:03 PM |
Rella Awesome Haha Mabye We Can Get On Togethor Sooner 20/20 |
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Rellean
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| 12 Aug 2013 01:24 PM |
| Any more ratings? All tips and feedback is greatly appreciated. |
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Rootling
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| 12 Aug 2013 01:47 PM |
| I won't say anymore than this... Make your raps a bit longer... |
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| 12 Aug 2013 04:42 PM |
Nothing for AlphaKing??
Sweg to the Left Sweg to the right. yulu |
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Rootling
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| 12 Aug 2013 05:07 PM |
| He's got the rhyming and flow down to a degree, however, I have to question his motives as far as his metaphors and similes being all over the place goes.. |
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| 12 Aug 2013 11:37 PM |
| Made no sense at all just saying jibberish and making it rhyme. This is't rap. |
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thebear97
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:18 AM |
| pls read the revised rules |
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:42 AM |
"Made no sense at all just saying jibberish and making it rhyme. This is't rap."
Who are you talking about?
Sweg to the Left Sweg to the right. yulu |
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Rellean
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:43 AM |
"Made no sense at all just saying jibberish and making it rhyme. This is't rap."
Maybe you're someone who is too ignorant to decode a metaphor, appreciate a rhyme scheme, and pay attention to lyrics.
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:46 AM |
Why don't you pay attention to your own wanna-be quote lyrics.
Yo chicken sauce, never ross, press pause. piece of paper, got a taper. tuna fish, no dish. mickey mouse, big house.
Come on son.
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Rellean
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:51 AM |
You come to me.
200 block Redwood City, CA. Dumbarton Avenue. Whats good? |
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Rellean
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:52 AM |
| Plane tickets are expensive, br0 |
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:54 AM |
Than shut your mouth unless you going to do something about it. And to your buddy TheAlpha, tell that nqqa he don't want beef with me. |
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johnb
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:56 AM |
| john he tried dissing me, biskit, and shady in a party chat. |
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johnb
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:57 AM |
| Well e-thugging and giving out your address isn't making you look particularly good |
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Rellean
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| 13 Aug 2013 12:57 AM |
| Yo, Hades is a real, G doe. I looked up his house, he in dat ruff LA, with dem 300k homes doe. |
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