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| 11 Aug 2013 09:55 PM |
Deep in the swamps of Nilhelm,a Vaktovian invasion was in the midst of beginning.
I and a squad of 15 men were rushing through the lush forests to ready our defences on swamps coast, then out of the blue came a Z-Class Starship the finest the Imperium had to offer and in the vessel stood Overlord Klethin Delargivic,And Emperor Tober Delargivic.
Overlord Klethin shouted "Halt Arcadians."
Our troop stopped in our tracks,and formed a shouler to shoulder line.
The scorching sun blazing on us, we mutter to ourselves complaining about the heat and our uniforms being affected by it.
Emperor Tober Speaks "Arcadians The invasion is coming afoot I want EVERY Arcadian to report to the coast yet I fly over and see you are going to the opposite side of the coast to flank them."
My scout checks the compass and such and it is true we have been going the wrong this whole time
I then say "Emperor If I may speak,It was my poor leadership that lead this troop the wrong way."
Tober ponders for a moment then speaks
"Apologies are accepted Valius,but I was going to say excellent work."
We all look at him astonished and confused.
Tober explains "It was a brilliant Tactic to flank them no one else had thought of it,we were about to send a troop but then we see you."
Klethin Interrupts "Yes fine work indeed even if it was not intentional."
Then Tober speaks "I apologize Valius but with a matter so important as flanking the enemy Lord Klethin will be taking over and commanding this troop you are now under his command arcadians."
I nod my head in gratitude and understandment.
Tober then enters the dropship and the vessel flies off to Alexandria.
The others and I watch as it beams through the sky.
Klethin then gets us out of our trance by booming "Arcadians we Fight today!"
We then begin marching once again through the treacherous terrain of the swamps
-[End of Chapter 1]-
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Iysander
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| 11 Aug 2013 09:57 PM |
tgi isnt worthy of your mighty literature
» WIJ Operative, WIJ STA T1 [2 Logs, 3/5, 4/5] [5 cP], Honor Prime Minister |
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| 11 Aug 2013 09:58 PM |
jk fallenflash, "Nicholas Fiendfyre" in next chapter too pls
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isee99
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:03 PM |
| Less arcadian more Vaktovian ok ok |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:04 PM |
| There will be soon isee the Invasion part has not begun yet |
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Optimaux
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meepo44
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:06 PM |
:o Meepo needs a sppooooott... :o
Because he does :o |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:19 PM |
| Put me in chapter 2 and 3. |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:27 PM |
| It's good. Just a few grammar Errors here and there. |
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DaBubs
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:29 PM |
Why am I never in these
There should always be bubbles |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:30 PM |
| Korukhan on chapter 2 please |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:55 PM |
| I and a squad of 15 men..? |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:56 PM |
| arcane just for posting your in it <3 |
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| 11 Aug 2013 10:56 PM |
Chapter 2
TGI and VAK killed each other
Spawns broke
The universe was shutdown by Xanvanxious |
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| 12 Aug 2013 12:27 AM |
| Put me as an Anti-Vak Rebel fighting with a mini-gun <:D |
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