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| 14 Jul 2013 04:52 PM |
How can your eyes be so enticing When you walk by Your smile catches every girl in the street I wonder why
But you choose me The lonely A girl to get her hopes up So when I looked up My fire lit up To see an angel at my door
I though you were an angel To save me To save me from my loneliness But when you knew I fell for you You grew a tail Some horns To reveal the devil Oh...oh oh...ohh oh oh...oh...
How was I such a foolish target To raise your bow I thought you had white feathery wings And a pure golden halo
But I loved you That I'd do Anything for you But from the sweet start We should've been apart Before you broke my heart
I though you were an angel To save me To save me from my loneliness But when you knew I fell for you You grew a tail Some horns To reveal the devil Oh...oh oh...ohh oh oh...oh...
Why oh why did I fall for you And your angelic looks But you crushed me Broke me And left me shattered on the ground Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
I thought you were an angel To save me Top save me from my loneliness But when you knew I fell for you You grew a tail Some horns To reveal the devil
Oh...oh oh...ohh oh oh...oh...
The Devil
Oh...oh oh...ohh oh oh...oh...
The Devil
Marks out of 10? This is my second song btw >.< cx COMMENTS l \/
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lazydyke
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| 14 Jul 2013 05:00 PM |
| I guess I'm not really cut out for song writing but I wanna keep on trying... |
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| 14 Jul 2013 07:25 PM |
By the name of Jesus Christ, I comandeth you to leave MT. Begone demon. |
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Yalx
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| 14 Jul 2013 07:27 PM |
| ... Why did you write a whole song. |
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| 15 Jul 2013 12:38 AM |
robthehobo - That's just plain mean
Yalx - I wanted to write a full song so I can try and write music to it |
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| 15 Jul 2013 12:40 AM |
| This is truly abismal, no, seriously, this is lacking in every sense of the word and you should feel ashamed of writing such rubbish. |
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Jared343
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| 15 Jul 2013 01:37 AM |
People are being a little too harsh. I kind of liked it.
6/10. |
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larus3
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| 15 Jul 2013 01:45 AM |
| Don't let your critics be too harsh. |
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| 15 Jul 2013 01:53 AM |
It's our opinion. She can't or can let us be harsh. Goof'd up, mang.
It doesn't change the fact this is just terrifyingly horrendous. |
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| 15 Jul 2013 09:27 AM |
"robthehobo - That's just plain mean"
Hey, don't blame me, your the one who mentioned the devil. |
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| 15 Jul 2013 09:27 AM |
is bad
0/10 would not recommend |
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| 15 Jul 2013 09:32 AM |
0/10
My mind is corrupted since I read this. |
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buck10me
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| 15 Jul 2013 10:00 AM |
Your mind?
My Flashdrive is corrupted now!
- http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7AnhjdmrUmU - |
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| 15 Jul 2013 11:09 AM |
To people who are being really kind...thanks !!!! If you do think it's bad then put it less harsh and maybe say what's bad about the song the cx |
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| 15 Jul 2013 01:41 PM |
| Aren't you people being a bit rude? Not every song is the greatest thing in the world, and to be honest, this is better than some modern songs... 7/10. |
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Crash6351
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| 15 Jul 2013 03:46 PM |
"Aren't you people being a bit rude? Not every song is the greatest thing in the world, and to be honest, this is better than some modern songs... 7/10."
Criticism is the most evillll thing in the world! |
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| 15 Jul 2013 04:00 PM |
"Criticism is the most evillll thing in the world!" _______________________________________
That's why there's this thing called "Constructive Criticism", you say what could be done to improve, and not that they need to leave, or just calling it bad. |
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