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| 06 Jun 2013 01:04 PM |
The Story By Blackdriveblox16
Once upon a time in a dark place,In a house,on a chair,were a kid. All alone. The Parents were gone.The kid were a girl named Sandra. It was only the girl and the darkness. The girl was watching TV,Didn't know what would happend. The parents were walking in the forest. Then,Some strange movements found place in a tree. The parents were watching up,But it was too late. The tree falled over them. Sandra did not know something about this,Before She heard Screaming. It was a big army of Zombies. Sandra took on her shoes and Jacket and runned out. She found her parents. Under the tree. She tried to lift the tree up. Then the parents said RUN! ZOMBIES! Sandra did not hear on them. She still tried to lift the tree. But then,They were right behind them. They were gonna take them,They were going to die. But then a Ship landed in the forest. Many WIJ Soldiers came out. They killed the zombies and saved the family. The Soldiers lifted the tree and saved the parents too. WIJ saved the day again. The family thanked all WIJ soldiers that did help. The Soldiers were going into the ship again. The ship flyed in the air and it didn't go many secounds before the ship were gone.
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| 06 Jun 2013 01:05 PM |
You combined WIJ with zombies?
YOU'RE SOOOOO GONNA WIN! |
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| 06 Jun 2013 01:05 PM |
-Sandra took on her Shoes and Jacket and runned out.
Yea, this one wins. |
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| 06 Jun 2013 01:08 PM |
tl;dr Also, ran, not runned. |
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| 06 Jun 2013 01:08 PM |
>''Sandra took on her Shoes and Jacket and runned out.'' >''and runned out'' >''runned out'' >''runned''.
*dubble facepalm* |
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| 07 Jun 2013 06:34 PM |
| OMG DIS IS COOL U ARE BEST WRITER EVAR |
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prattmatt
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| 27 Jun 2013 06:29 PM |
4/10 for grammar. 3/10 for originality. I can't judge the amount of time you put into this. 8/10 for the good ending.
~̛̪̲̳̣̤̦̜͖͔̜̾̈́̓́̿̏͑̚͝Ŗ̻͓͔̻̼̫͖͙̻͛͗̎̈͗̾̉̈̐̈́N̛̳̖̰̩̹̩̥̝̠͙͐̈́̾͂̃̇̿̀́W̧̲͉̤̖͓̰͚̗͚̄̇̾̒̏̉̑̏͂̕ ̧̫̳̤̭̭̝̤͚͈͐͒̄̒̂̍̑͐̔͠1̨̹̤̯͈̟̤̣͖̝́̽̀̔́̀́͌͂͝s̪͈͇̮͉̭̘̲͈̥̿͊͂̎̿̌̆̈̀͐t̢̛̲̰̠͕̖̬͉̬̖̓̐́̑̌͛̃͘͝.̘̙͉̜̻̭̮̼͙͓̎̔̌̾͂̂͛̒̿̚ ̧̯̭̪̞͉̭͚̪̺̈́͌͑̍̊̒͂̀̊͂Ļ̥̞̘͔͙̠̤̪̼͑͒̔̓̋̍̊͊̌̕ţ̢͙̲͉̤̩̜̩̽̔͌̾̈́̊̽͝͠͝ͅ ͈̯̪͕̼̟̹̟̞̥̓̀̏́̅̊̈́͆̽̈́M̡̨̬̱̖̩͎̼̗̜͆͒̌̑̈́̉́͒͐̕ä̢̻̦̼̖͓̭́̉̔̈́̓̐́̈́͌͒͜ͅͅţ̛̪̲̻̥̭̥̮̠̤̌͒̃̅̏̎̓́̿ț̡̨̫̜̦̱̞͔̅̂̈̒̄́̑̕̕͠ͅ |
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| 29 Jun 2013 10:28 AM |
I sugest that you get a brand new product wich just came out WIJ`s labs: GRAMMAR.
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