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| 22 Jun 2013 05:53 PM |
| Sonic looked out of the glass windows of the tower at Alianor. Everyone was doing there jobs and soldiers worked to keep the fort safe. Sonic was about to go back to his daily business when he heard a gunshot. He turned with ease and looked out the windows. He saw red banners in the distant as soldiers blasted their guns at surprised FEAR soldiers. FEAR General LordNobody ran into the room in a rush. “Sir Vaktovians have infiltrated the walls A helicopter is ready for your departure”. Sonic turned swiftly and silently as he walked out of the room with LordNobody following. Sonic reached the roof of the tower where he found dozens of helicopters taking off. Sonic went into the helicopter LordNobody had went into and sat down. “We will be arriving at Terra in 3 hours.” The pilot said into his microphone as he checked his control board. The helicopter lifted into the sky as Vaktovians shot their guns trying to hit the helicopters. Sonic watched as one of the helicopters was hit as it fell to the ground in a blaze of flames. The helicopter shaked as bullets hit it. Sonic gripped his arm rests as the helicopter flew past Alianor. The Helicopter has flown past Alianor safely and Sonic loosened his grip on the arm rests. The last things Sonic saw was Alianor falling. |
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| 22 Jun 2013 05:55 PM |
| I would like to hear feedback good and bad but I don't want it to be rude so please I don't wanna see any rude comments of such. Please tell me whats wrong with the story and whats bad no reason to start a fight. |
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| 22 Jun 2013 06:28 PM |
| fantastic! The only bad thing is the names are cheesey and its a bit short but apart from that its awsome! PLEASE MOAR MOAR! |
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| 22 Jun 2013 08:26 PM |
Thanks and it short cause its just the first chapter. :P
--The next chapter will come out next weekend-- |
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| 22 Jun 2013 09:09 PM |
cant wait
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| 22 Jun 2013 11:37 PM |
Wow really good, I enjoy a lot of stories based on group events, this one is very good.
Can't wait to hear more. |
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| 22 Jun 2013 11:40 PM |
| Thanks. I had just got the chapter edited by my sister and it should be out by tomorrow instead of next week. |
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| 23 Jun 2013 02:28 AM |
| Chapter 2: http://www.roblox.com/Forum/ShowPost.aspx?PostID=102405102 |
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| 23 Jun 2013 07:50 AM |
chapter 2 just came out now!
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| 25 Jun 2013 07:55 AM |
There's no way A fort Can fall that fast Even if the attackers Were Vikings. |
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| 26 Jun 2013 03:21 PM |
| The Vaktovians had outnumbered the forces at Alainor and with more weapons they took out the fort in a matter of minutes. |
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| 17 Nov 2013 12:07 PM |
| Long time since a bump I just want to hear feed back |
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