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jack0800 is not online. jack0800
Joined: 16 Feb 2009
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08 Jun 2013 02:38 PM
Here is my entry to the WIJ Story Writing Contest 2013. I will try to make this as enjoyable and accurate as possible, but I am basing this on pre-BiB tech and some fictional tech and facts, names may be fictional, but some names will be real. I apologise in advance if anyone takes offense over anything I mention or say in this story, I do not mean offence. Anyway, here it is, I hope you enjoy reading this work of fiction.


Planet 514

Onboard the WSC Bellicus...
Parker sprang up in feverish scream. He was drenched in sweat. He was scared.
Parker was a kid, driven into the criminal world by his family's poor social status and economical situation. He can clearly remember what he had done to earn the two years of National Service in the WIJ Corporation.

1 year earlier...

He was 17 years old, left school after failing his exams. His family was poor, and referred to as low-life by the other residents of the city; always in the news for criminal activities. He had nothing going for him, just the need to feed his family, two brothers aged just 11 and 12, and his mother, who was crippled in a failed shop robbery, of which she attempted to jump down from a 5 metre ledge, and landed on railings, breaking her spine. They didn't have the money for the expensive procedure to repair the damage, and thus remained either in a wheelchair or in their tiny, grotty slum-like house. His father was in a government correctional facility (prison) serving 15 years after the murder of a 22 year old lady, he attempted to claim manslaughter, as he "only tried to mug her". But the Judge felt this should only increase the sentance as this proves he deliberately set out to cause her harm, so he is out of the question. It's just Parker to feed the four of them. But, no employer in the modern, and very much developed civilisation he lives in, where criminals and school drop-outs are the lowest members of society, so it would be a near-impossible job to find work, let alone a job that pays enough to support his commitments.

So he steers towards the darkness of the criminal world, stealing whatever comes his way when he gets the chance. Anything from lengths of rope, to mining lasers fall victim to his theft, and he generates enough from the black-market to get by comfortably. But he has a plan, a school-mate works for a construction company, that is currently being contracted by the military (the WIJ Corporation) to build a secure storage facility. He plans to head round his friend's house, Eric Patterson, and steal one of his work passes, giving Parker the ability to enter the facility, which is already being used despite having the finishing touches still being worked on. Once inside he is going to find some sort of hand-held container, and stuff it with as much as he can carry, then simply walk out the way he came in. Parker, not the smartest lad, thinks this is a flawless plan, that is guaranteed to go without a hitch.
He manages to obtain the pass easily, reinforcing his idea that this will be easy, and continues to commute to the facility. The security guarding the facility are spread far between, as the bunk room is not complete, staffed by a mere 4 WIJian Troopers; two on the entrance/exit gate, and two patrolling around the facility.
The gate is a standard Military contraption, with a blue-ish energy field, with a small hole for the pass to be scanned, thus temporally disabling the energy field, allowing the person to walk through. Under the bored and cold watch of the two troopers, he passes through nervously, walks around a building to the left of the gate, following a concrete path laid into the ground. He comes to a sign, with a colour-coded system: Blue for the Canteen, sleeping facilities and toilet. Red for the Armoury, Guard post and Communication room. Yellow for the main storage building. Following the yellow line painted onto the path, Parker soon walks beneath a archway, with a disabled energy field unit, that appears to be out of order.
Once inside, Parker's eyes widen at the range of equipment stored away inside. Everything from small head-sets to grenade launchers are stored in crates. With no further obstacles in his path, he happily walks over to a crate containing Y-14 pistols; but as he bends down to open the lid of the crate, a noise from outside stops him in his tracks. Turning his head to the side, looking out of a nearby window, he is stunned to see several Technical's pull up at the main gate. Technicals resemble cars, with two seats in the front, and a rear mounted turret at the back, standard "sqauddie" transport in WIJ. From one of the technicals steps a Officer, who dismisses the young garrison commander, who is only a Corporal, and starts walking to the very building Parker is currently in.
Parker, being the nervous and out-of-his-depth kid he is, panics, forgetting he has a legitimate reason for being where he is. But no, he snatches the nearest item in reach, a half-built Y-14, and sprints out of the door.
For the troops now walking ever-closer to the storage building, seeing a skinny 17 year old welding what, at first glance, appears to be a Y-14 is quite a surprise.
"Stop! Stay where you are." A Sergeant, wearing a Green beret, shouts at the kid. He and a Corporal then run towards Parker, who in response turns and runs the complete opposite direction, towards a concertina-wire topped perimeter fence. Parker scales the fence quickly, whilst unseen to him, a Technical with a quick thinking driver reverses and speeds around to the other side of the fence. But once atop of the fence, Parker finds himself tangled and bleeding from the wire. By this point, the Sergeant grabs his foot, and attempts to pull him down, Parker kicks his foot free and tries to leap over the fence. Now dangling, Parker is frantically trying to free himself. All he is rewarded with for his efforts is becoming ever more tangled. Meanwhile, the Officer is just smirking as he watches his Sergeant scream at the kid.
"I expect a full report on how a young man accessed a secure military facility, and was allowed to obtain a firearm, Corporal." He says to the young Corporal in charge of the security of the facility, who is now nervously looking around for another person to blame for this embarrassment.
Parker has been dragged down from the wire by a pair of burly troopers, and is being handcuffed, before being beaten unconscious by the Sergeant, now welding a Stunstick.
He wakes up in a brightly light detainment cell, just as a escort come in to collect him and take him before a court.
"Mr R.Parker, could you explain why you where in a secure military facility, with a stolen firearm in your hand?" Enquires the judge. Parker doesn't answer, just looks at his feet.
"Where you trying to steal from the facility?" Probes the judge.
Parker thinks this through, maybe if he is honest, he'll get off better? Worth a try, he thinks.
"Yes, I was." Parker admits, in response the Judge just looks disappointed.
"You are a very silly boy, do you know what kind of trouble you are in? Do you know how many kids I see, just like you, who end up being sentenced to very, VERY long times in Prison?" Parker stares the judge in the eye, scared out of his mind. He's never been caught before.
"Kid, I'm afraid stealing is a offence that is not taken lightly in our soicety, you have a choice, 7 years in a government correctional facility, or two years nation service in the WIJ Corporation."
"Erm, I guess I'll er." Parker, who is now thinking of his family, of 7 hard years in prison, or 2 in the military, he wants to return as soon as he can, and besides, the WIJ Corporation pay their troops.
"I'll do the national serivce."

Thanks for reading the first chapter of the story, more to come of course, post what you think below. Thanks :P
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jack0800 is not online. jack0800
Joined: 16 Feb 2009
Total Posts: 131
08 Jun 2013 03:19 PM
Sorry bout this guys, forgot to read what I was posting, heres the real version :P Here is my entry to the WIJ Story Writing Contest 2013. I will try to make this as enjoyable and accurate as possible, but I am basing this on pre-BiB tech and some fictional tech and facts, names may be fictional, but some names will be real. I apologise in advance if anyone takes offense over anything I mention or say in this story, I do not mean offence. Anyway, here it is, I hope you enjoy reading this work of fiction.
Planet 514
Onboard the WSC Bellicus...
Parker sprang up in feverish scream. He was drenched in sweat. He was scared.
Parker was a kid, driven into the criminal world by his family's poor social status and economical situation. He can clearly remember what he had done to earn the two years of National Service in the WIJ Corporation.

1 year earlier...
He was 17 years old, left school after failing his exams. His family was poor, and referred to as low-life by the other residents of the city; always in the news for criminal activities. He had nothing going for him, just the need to feed his family, two brothers aged just 11 and 12, and his mother, who was crippled in a failed shop robbery, of which she attempted to jump down from a 5 metre ledge, and landed on railings, breaking her spine. They didn't have the money for the expensive procedure to repair the damage, and thus remained either in a wheelchair or in their tiny, grotty slum-like house. His father was in a government correctional facility (prison) serving 15 years after the murder of a 22 year old lady, he attempted to claim manslaughter, as he "only tried to mug her". But the Judge felt this should only increase the sentance as this proves he deliberately set out to cause her harm, so he is out of the question. It's just Parker to feed the four of them. But, no employer in the modern, and very much developed civilisation he lives in, where criminals and school drop-outs are the lowest members of society, so it would be a near-impossible job to find work, let alone a job that pays enough to support his commitments.

So he steers towards the darkness of the criminal world, stealing whatever comes his way when he gets the chance. Anything from lengths of rope, to mining lasers fall victim to his theft, and he generates enough from the black-market to get by comfortably. But he has a plan, a school-mate works for a construction company, that is currently being contracted by the military (the WIJ Corporation) to build a secure storage facility. He plans to head round his friend's house, Eric Patterson, and steal one of his work passes, giving Parker the ability to enter the facility, which is already being used despite having the finishing touches still being worked on. Once inside he is going to find some sort of hand-held container, and stuff it with as much as he can carry, then simply walk out the way he came in. Parker, not the smartest lad, thinks this is a flawless plan, that is guaranteed to go without a hitch.

He manages to obtain the pass easily, reinforcing his idea that this will be easy, and continues to commute to the facility. The security guarding the facility are spread far between, as the bunk room is not complete, staffed by a mere 4 WIJian Troopers; two on the entrance/exit gate, and two patrolling around the facility.
The gate is a standard Military contraption, with a blue-ish energy field, with a small hole for the pass to be scanned, thus temporally disabling the energy field, allowing the person to walk through. Under the bored and cold watch of the two troopers, he passes through nervously, walks around a building to the left of the gate, following a concrete path laid into the ground. He comes to a sign, with a colour-coded system: Blue for the Canteen, sleeping facilities and toilet. Red for the Armoury, Guard post and Communication room. Yellow for the main storage building. Following the yellow line painted onto the path, Parker soon walks beneath a archway, with a disabled energy field unit, that appears to be out of order.

Once inside, Parker's eyes widen at the range of equipment stored away inside. Everything from small head-sets to grenade launchers are stored in crates. With no further obstacles in his path, he happily walks over to a crate containing Y-14 pistols; but as he bends down to open the lid of the crate, a noise from outside stops him in his tracks. Turning his head to the side, looking out of a nearby window, he is stunned to see several Technical's pull up at the main gate. Technicals resemble cars, with two seats in the front, and a rear mounted turret at the back, standard "sqauddie" transport in WIJ. From one of the technicals steps a Officer, who dismisses the young garrison commander, who is only a Corporal, and starts walking to the very building Parker is currently in.

Parker, being the nervous and out-of-his-depth kid he is, panics, forgetting he has a legitimate reason for being where he is. But no, he snatches the nearest item in reach, a half-built Y-14, and sprints out of the door.

For the troops now walking ever-closer to the storage building, seeing a skinny 17 year old welding what, at first glance, appears to be a Y-14 is quite a surprise.
"Stop! Stay where you are." A Sergeant, wearing a Green beret, shouts at the kid. He and a Corporal then run towards Parker, who in response turns and runs the complete opposite direction, towards a concertina-wire topped perimeter fence. Parker scales the fence quickly, whilst unseen to him, a Technical with a quick thinking driver reverses and speeds around to the other side of the fence. But once atop of the fence, Parker finds himself tangled and bleeding from the wire. By this point, the Sergeant grabs his foot, and attempts to pull him down, Parker kicks his foot free and tries to leap over the fence. Now dangling, Parker is frantically trying to free himself. All he is rewarded with for his efforts is becoming ever more tangled. Meanwhile, the Officer is just smirking as he watches his Sergeant scream at the kid.

"I expect a full report on how a young man accessed a secure military facility, and was allowed to obtain a firearm, Corporal." He says to the young Corporal in charge of the security of the facility, who is now nervously looking around for another person to blame for this embarrassment.
Parker has been dragged down from the wire by a pair of burly troopers, and is being handcuffed, before being beaten unconscious by the Sergeant, now welding a Stunstick.

He wakes up in a brightly light detainment cell, just as a escort come in to collect him and take him before a court.

"Mr R.Parker, could you explain why you where in a secure military facility, with a stolen firearm in your hand?" Enquires the judge. Parker doesn't answer, just looks at his feet.

"Where you trying to steal from the facility?" Probes the judge.
Parker thinks this through, maybe if he is honest, he'll get off better? Worth a try, he thinks.

"Yes, I was." Parker admits, in response the Judge just looks disappointed.

"You are a very silly boy, do you know what kind of trouble you are in? Do you know how many kids I see, just like you, who end up being sentenced to very, VERY long times in Prison?" Parker stares the judge in the eye, scared out of his mind. He's never been caught before.

"Kid, I'm afraid stealing is a offence that is not taken lightly in our society, you have a choice, 7 years in a government correctional facility, or two years national service in the WIJ Corporation."

"Erm, I guess I'll er." Parker, who is now thinking of his family, of 7 hard years in prison, or 2 in the military, he wants to return as soon as he can, and besides, the WIJ Corporation pay their troops.
"I'll do the national service."

Thanks for reading the first chapter of the story, more to come of course, post what you think below. Thanks :P
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