Voile
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Casey347
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| 07 Jun 2013 07:59 AM |
Once upon a time, I few mistakes awhat? DOG STOP BARKING!!! I was- DOG!! GR.
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Voile
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| 07 Jun 2013 08:13 AM |
| its ok, but ive seen better |
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| 07 Jun 2013 08:14 AM |
Plot holes -
who da bad guy |
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Voile
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| 07 Jun 2013 03:55 PM |
2.55/3.1 would read again
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Voile
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| 07 Jun 2013 03:57 PM |
It touched me in my special place.
My heart, obviously. |
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| 07 Jun 2013 04:05 PM |
| I Think it Was Cool but I Think Bad Guy was Really Good Guy because good guy would not have kid.? that would be really cool. Other Than 8/10 maybe i think should you make chaper 7 i would read now. |
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Voile
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| 07 Jun 2013 04:14 PM |
| yo dis like be so cool like yeah dis constructive criticism yeah |
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mike1291
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| 07 Jun 2013 04:22 PM |
ths wer nub stry
i wsnt in it |
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Voile
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mike1291
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Voile
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