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Re: [XL] Chapter 1: The Departure

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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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03 Jun 2013 10:22 PM
KEY: **** (Time lapse between parts)

Chapter I: The Departure

A Messenger of Rome arrives at a town 80 miles from Strageth. He's been sent by Emperor Hadrian for a very important task. He stays at an Inn near Hadrian's Wall. As he's sitting at a table having a few drinks, a killer comes in and starts cutting people left and right, the Inn up roars in a wave of drunken in the frenzy, the messenger gets stabbed and is on his death bed. The Captain of that village has another messenger run to Strageth to deliver the message.

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A day goes by until the messenger sees the outline of the fort in the morning fog. It's cold, damp, and you always have to be on alert for random barbarian attacks. For the past 10 years, Emperor Hadrian sent the 10th-Legion above a new fortification wall called Hadrian's Wall. This new wall will fortify Britannia and protect it's self form northern raids.

The Messenger reaches the fort and walks straight to the Town Hall where the Imperator Blackpig72 is talking with a few Centurions about the defense of the outlining lands. The Messenger greets Blackpig with a formal greeting and hands him the message.
Blackpig said "Get this man a blanket, water and a warm meal." A few Miles walk off with the messenger to the barracks. Blackpig reads the message quietly to himself and is frustrated, but in awe at the same time. He's been in the fort for almost 10 years now and never dared to venture out of the fort due to constant Barbarian raids.

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Later that day, he gathers the 10th Legion in the fort and tells them what we're doing and where they are heading.
Blackpig said "We are leaving on the morrow, soldiers. Eat hearty and sleep well as it's a long journey to Germania."
With this being said, all the soldiers went to sleep, except a select few. Blackpig told the Centurions to stay back and discuss this new assignment. The Imperator wanted everyone's opinion on the transfer from Britannia to Germania. He knew his task was to hold the land in front of the Hadrian's Wall until it was completed, but he expected retirement after his long service to Rome, but when the Emperor asked something of him, he will die doing it.
Blackpig said "What do you think of the transfer form Britania to Germania?"
Aldrun said "It'll be a long and dangerous journey, I hope many survive, if not all of them do."
Ppiipp5, Clonetrooper039, and Sporebnb all agreed.
Warriorjlb said "Why does it have to be on the front lines all the time? I haven't seen my family in 5 yeas."
Blackpig said "I know, Warrior, except the Emperor has requested to defend Germania so he can build more defensive walls on more 'Hostile' fronts."
Warrior sigh.
Zealots asked "How do you think the soldiers will handle the transfer?"
Blacpig said "I'm not sure."
The other Centurions agreed.
Haden said "Are we taking by boat to Germania or are we walking?"
Blackpig said "The Emperor couldn't afford boats all the way, so we'll have to walk from the channel."
The other Centurions groaned.
Blackpig stood up and said "Without anythign else to say or discuss, I'm heading to bed, good night."
The other Centurions Valed' each other and went to sleep.

~Grand Master (14,022+ posts) "You are no more of a king than the boil on my arse" [08'er]
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clonetrooper039 is not online. clonetrooper039
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03 Jun 2013 10:23 PM
:p
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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03 Jun 2013 10:24 PM
I like short stories <:

~Grand Master (14,022+ posts) "You are no more of a king than the boil on my arse" [08'er]
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smorg30 is not online. smorg30
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03 Jun 2013 10:26 PM
Good story so far!
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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03 Jun 2013 10:31 PM
Opinions or thoughts for Chapter II?
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meepo44 is not online. meepo44
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03 Jun 2013 10:56 PM
Have them get ambushed. I WANT IN! Here i will give a list of people that should be extras. Excludeing HRs because thats obvious.

People in camps:

Tekki:1
cojach:2
dadric:3
meandog:4
spored:5
delta:6
ultra:7
shannon:8
blackcat:9
nickrod:10
igeur:11
bone:12
zaak:13
rick:14
perlox:15
werty:16
longrhino:17
buck:18
epic:19
phant:20
aliveb:21
lordo:22
piper:23
shrek:24
zad:25
akilly:26
frizt:27
meepo:28
ninja:29
hunter:30

These 30 people are the ones that can make up of the characters secondary in any given situation as in battle, on the road, in camp. This trek im supposeing will take a great deal of time. Kill off as many of us as you wish.

Each persons perks and things (Which they would have brought with them bought or had sent to them, dureing their long long stay at the northern fronts, so everyone would be carrying their own weapons armour and perks)

(I will leave the HRs out of this. Since they may post themSELVES What they want on. Everyone else can ask Zealots if he will change theirs)

Tekki: Forged hollowed mettal spikes onto his shield, increaseing bash damage.
cojach:
dadric:
meandog:
spored:
delta:
ultra:
shannon:
blackcat:
nickrod:
igeur:
bone:
zaak:
rick:
perlox:
werty:
longrhino:
buck:
epic:
phantom:
aliveb:
lordo:
piper:
shrek:
zad:
akilly:
frizt:
meepo:
ninja:
hero:
rich:
hunter:


If you have questions as to these peoples full names or want changes made.
Ask and i will report :o :3























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meepo44 is not online. meepo44
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03 Jun 2013 11:49 PM
Posted one above compleatly by mistake X_X


Have them get ambushed. I WANT IN! Here i will give a list of people that should be extras. Excludeing HRs because thats obvious.

People in camps:

Tekki:1
cojach:2
dadric:3
meandog:4
spored:5
meepo:6
ultra:7
shannon:8
blackcat:9
nickrod:10
bone:11
frizt:12
perlox:13
longrhino:14
buck:15
phant:16
aliveb:17
lordo:18
piper:19
shrek:20

These 20 people are the ones that can make up of the characters secondary in any given situation as in battle, on the road, in camp. This trek im supposeing will take a great deal of time. Kill off as many of us as you wish.

Each persons perks and things (Which they would have brought with them bought or had sent to them, dureing their long long stay at the northern fronts, so everyone would be carrying their own weapons armour and perks)

(I will leave the HRs out of this. Since they may post themSELVES What they want on. Everyone else can ask Zealots if he will change theirs)

Tekki: Forged hollowed mettal spikes onto his shield, increaseing bash damage.
cojach: Sword is from a far off land. Its handle is long and its blade is flat and very sharp.
dadric: Has two barbarian hand axes that he claimed from a chieften.
meandog: Holds a large spiked club (Mace) that can pummle enemys into the ground.
spored: Rides a gigantic brown horse, which he found walking benevonently in the base.
aliveb: Pili made from strong, delicatly shaped wood, with a razor blade edge on top.
ultra: Carrys in a scabbard on his back a big heavy two handed greatsword.
shannon: Holds high none other then the standard of the deviosion spoken of here.
blackcat: Rides atop a heavily armoured chargeing horse carrying a Iron tipped lance.
nickrod: Travels with two smaller and lighter blades.
piper: Carrys a 4 foot double bladed battleaxe. Not very heavy but pretty effective.
bonefren: A 3.5 foot bow with over 30 arrows in the quiver. A short range bow.
lordof: Holds a chargeing spear. This spear is both heavy and small. For impaleing.
perlox: Owns a donkey with which he carrys all sorts of unnessacery equipment.
longrhino: Wears a set of the best (and only still compleat) Set of armour in the devision.
buck: Holds a 5 foot bow of strong and bendy wood, and 8, 5 foot arrows with razor tip.
phantom: Carrys 3 throwing daggers.
shrek:Drags a 40 pound sack of food and cooking tools *Frying pans are weapons too*
frizty: The sword has the handle in the middle and has blades on both ends.
meepo: Sword and sheath are made from a shiny metal thats far lighter then a iron blade.

If you have questions as to these peoples full names or want changes made.
Ask and i will change them :o
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Vannarz is not online. Vannarz
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04 Jun 2013 06:11 AM
Too much O.O
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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04 Jun 2013 06:24 AM
Meepo, to lazy to write all that.
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AlphaBlackout is not online. AlphaBlackout
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04 Jun 2013 06:47 AM
Pretty Nice, but don't forget ze Aquilifer, can't have a legion without him.
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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04 Jun 2013 06:48 AM
Alpha, you and signifiers are mainly in the new coning chapters when we're moving.
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xelorTIME is not online. xelorTIME
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04 Jun 2013 07:05 AM
I would criticize your lack of complex English skills, but I''m not a hater. There is so much you could improve but I would assume you intended to target 10 year olds.
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Hunter6252 is not online. Hunter6252
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04 Jun 2013 07:19 AM
Like it so far, but I want in the story! Dibs on being smorgies Guard or something.
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uncoverloser is not online. uncoverloser
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04 Jun 2013 07:21 AM
Nice, very nice.





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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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04 Jun 2013 08:05 AM
Xelor, I can make it so only a select few understand, but that'd be pointless.
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deadfighter is not online. deadfighter
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04 Jun 2013 08:07 AM
Will all HR's be in? :3
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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04 Jun 2013 08:25 AM
Yes. All the HR will be in Part II.
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Cooloboss is not online. Cooloboss
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04 Jun 2013 09:08 AM
Zealot that's a every intresting story. I would like to be in the story aswell, but I have to say that was the most intresting and fun to read story about a group. Nice work
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AwsomeAndrewD is not online. AwsomeAndrewD
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04 Jun 2013 10:02 AM
Everyone is impressed with the story, I'm impressed with the ID of the thread :3
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AwsomeAndrewD is not online. AwsomeAndrewD
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04 Jun 2013 10:05 AM
Story also is good :3
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DeltaAlpha1234 is not online. DeltaAlpha1234
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04 Jun 2013 01:01 PM
meepo y u take me out of extras qq

i could be le archer
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meepo44 is not online. meepo44
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04 Jun 2013 01:10 PM
Not enough room. Cut it down to twenty. Pretty much ignored grammar up there. Was pressed for time writeing it. It took FOAVAH! (Grammar fail, u hatin?) But just in case he needed any part of that. There it is.
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xelorTIME is not online. xelorTIME
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04 Jun 2013 01:13 PM
Zealtos, sorry, that came out right, what I meant was, I supposed you intended to make it this simple, but your simplicity doesn't reach a basic structure to a story. If you don't know what I mean, you seem to be repeating sentence structures which are ONLY found in 4 year old books. Not criticizing, just highlighting obvious flaws.
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Blackpig72 is not online. Blackpig72
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04 Jun 2013 01:20 PM
If that were true, it'd be something like, imperator went to england, imperator came home.
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Zealots is not online. Zealots
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04 Jun 2013 01:50 PM
Xelor, Chapter 1 was meant to get the basics, chapters II+ will have much more detailed implanted into them and much longer. So in a few days, Chapter II will come out, maybe longer.

~Grand Master (14,022+ posts) "You are no more of a king than the boil on my arse"
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